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Wow, Becky is really finding out how high stress being a super hero can be. I wonder how exactly Team Alhanumeric plans to overcome their doulbes? Who knows, Maybe Tobey could provide them with some kind of advantage?

Not bad, so far. Though I don't think Becky would be so quick to forgive and forget with Tobey, especially after everything he's put her through. I think Violet and Becky still need to sit down and have a serious talk on the subject.

Whoa whoa slow down a bit. You shouldn't have them figure the whole thing out right off the bat. It's more fun to reveal the mystery slowly, one bit at a time. Besides they wouldn't know everything about the other side out of nowhere like that. And I'd still like to see Violet and Tobey's situation. Maybe have Violet drag Tobey out on a first date. We haven't really seen how their personality interact with each other while they're not under the influence of the lust ray.

And what about my idea of Violet trying to convince Tobey to be a crime fighter? That alone could pour a ton of comedy gold into the story. Here's a thought. Start the chapter with Violet taking Tobey somewhere, maybe the park or carnival. At first Tobey grumbles, claiming it's boring. But then he's shocked to realize he doesn't mind being around Violet so much and that he might even be starting to have fun.

Then you could have Dr. Tubing contact Team Alpha Numeric about temporal anomilies he dects. They go to the spot, only to find the alternate four and proceed to get thrashed by them. Wordgirl calls retreat and they pull out. Later on they could discover some type of ship the other soldiers are using.

Math Whiz could somehow tap into their computer systems and download historyt files that explain the whole thing. Team Alphanumeric would have two big shocks to face. The fact that they suffered their first real true defeat. And the shock to Becky to find out that her alternate self is a vicious tyrant.

Heh, a normal day in the life of a not so normal family. Two brains actually thinks Wordgirl will live for hundreds of years? Doesn't the ring know about Carina, yet? The Phantom had the same thing going. Everybody thought he was immortal, nobody ever figured out it could be a family legacy. Hmm, this little time travel plot gives me an idea for a possible future storyline. I'll email you the details.

Heh, I can see a new potential headache for Becky. What if Violet, as The Framer, attempts to introduce Tobey to the wonderful world of crime fighting? And of course, Eileen, not wanting to be left out and thinking she can impress Caelum, decides to jump in, too. Look out world, here comes the Hero Squad. I get the feeling Team Alphanumeric are in for a LONG day. I really don't think Becky ever had the hear to tell Violet that she didn't actually have any super powers. Ooh and Carina starts begging mommy to let her join the Hero Squad, too.

Hee hee, man Caelum is never gonna hear the end of that. I just hope Becky doesn't get too mad at Violet. And I don't think Phantasma is gonna forget this anytime soon.

Dr. Two-Brains, playing with time machines? Not good. Nice chapter, but Violet came off sounding a bit too manipulative. Remember, Violet is fairly innocent. She thinks what she's doing is justified. It doesn't occur to her to consider the consequences. It would have made more sense for the lust ray to have hit Becky and Tim by accident. With the lust ray set to 11 like that there would have been an all out sex fest. I'd hate to be the one to clean up. Oh and you missed an opportunity to have Carina ask Caelum why mommy and daddy were hugging so much at Tobey's. There are some things even an X weapon can't handle.

Hee hee, oh this is gonna get good. I can't wait to see how Becky reacts to Violet's little plan.

Aw, cute moment. Looks like Tim still has ome issues to work out. Again with the nitpicking, but I think you mean extnsions. Oh, I've been having some trouble with my comp. I won't be able to comment much. But, I'm going to keep reading.

Heh, nice to finally see things getting back to normal. Though Becky was REALLY restraining herself there, I'm surprised she didn't just rip the head warlord's head off. Oh one thing though and this is just me being nit picky again. The Lexiconian gravity wouldn't really effect all of Becky's powers, only the ones that were gravity based, like fight and strength. Here super hearing would have been as strong as it ever was.

Well, so much for secrecy. But don't worry, even if Tim's not around. Don't forget Huggy's there. And even with the stress and extra gravity Becky is far from a damsel in distress. Why do I get the feeling that sniper is gonna get beaten with their own rifle?