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Looking good so far. But one thing. Don't just show action sequences. After the Chaos thing blows over, why not show a couple of chapters of them kicking back, relaxing. Maybe spending quality time with Carina and Huggy? Remember Hugyy, how long has it been since we've even seen him.

Oh a quick tip. Song lyrics in the middle of a chapter are ok once or twice, but seriously, there are limits.

Nice chapter. Though you should remember Two Brains was never really that much into getting rid of Wordgirl. He was just a cheese obsessed maniac. Oh I should have mentioned this last chapter, but I forgot. It's trident. Triton is the king of Atlantis in the Little Mermaid.

Heh, I wonder which half of Tim's better half Becky was talking about? Anyway the song was too easy, man. Any transformers fan would get it. Now I just wished you could have worked this song into it. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IZ6iwdDhIt4&feature=channel_page

Anyway it's best not to complicate things when you don't have to. Fire and Ice will do fine. As for the new kind, stick with the classics. Why not Chaos himself? No friends, no enemies, he screws with everybody equally. I assume Wordgirl and Math Whiz are taking Fire and Ice back to Dr. Tubing's lab? I doubt they'd just leave them laying around like that.

Oh and Zaniah is right to be cautious. Chaos cares nothing for power, all he wants is destruction.

Ooh, looks like there's trouble brewing. Well, more trouble anyway. I hope Carina enjoyed her little romp. Oh and no offense, but SO didn't need to hear the foot thing.

this is just too cute

Heh, this is gonna get fun. So, I take it Becky and Tim just got an upgrade? That's ok, but let's try to keep them from going to Superman level, I mean their are limits. Heh, wouldn't it be funny if Carina, with her new suped up powers, were the one to beat Krog, without even trying to do it. Maybe she just wants to play with him and ends up flattening him by mistake. Becky and Tim are gonnha have to keep a closer eye on her in future.

Hmm, interesting, I assume that stone holds some power. And I just realized something. There is at least one difference between the dimensions. I highly doubt Empress Zaniah found the time to settle down and have a kid. And I couldn't help but notice that Carina came into contact with the necklace before her mother did. Perhaps, in some odd way, it could be Carina that somehow turns the tide.

Judging by what Fire and Ice said, I assume at some point they were heroes themselves. Maybe they were tired of being used by the people they were trying to protect and that's what triggered this rampage. It's been so long, that they've forgotten that real innocence does exist. Maybe Carina will somehow be the one to somehow spark the last embers of whatever heroic feelings these two have left.

In the end, Carina could be the one to save the day. Oh, here's a question. Do you think in the Empress's dimension, there weapons are still programmed not to target people with Lexiconian or Decimalian DNA? Cause remember, Carina has both.

Hee, evil alternates vs. Fire and Ice, this Sunday Sunday Sunday. Heh, sorry, couldn't resist. You can post the fic anywhere you like. But, just so you know, I have little use for fanfiction.net. It's a long story and I don't want to get into it.

Hi, sorry about not reviewing for so long. I had some comp troubles. Anyway, decent couple of chapters. I'm just going to run over a couple of points.

First off didn't the alternates managed to succesfully fire the lust cannon before they were hit with the lust ray? Shouldn't there have been like a massive city wide orgy at some point? Or does everybody just prefer to not think about it?

Fire and Ice, a bit random, but decent new villains. It'll be nice to see Wordgirl and the rest battling someone they can't just pummel their way through. Maybe Team Alphanumeric could figure out a wayto take advantage of the two big enemies. Like luring the alternates and Fire and Ice to the same place and conning them into battling each other. It's a possability.

Whee bit too much inforation with the whips and chains. Hee, level twelve all over the city? This is going to be one hell of a party. Maybe Team Alphanumeric could work out a way to turn the lust ray against Zaniah and her counterparts. One other idea, though Caelum would be Loathe to use it, I highly doubt the other dimension has Eileen in it, at least not the king kong sized version. Hmm, you think Violet and Tobey might make a little hell raiser of their own? They've already had sex once, though under the influence of the lust ray, mayhe Violet is keepinga little secret.