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Not, bad, though I wish you'd have stretched the scene with Violet out a bit more. Don't be afraid to add a little length to your chapters. Ok, pour choice of words. But just imagine trying to fly straight while holding someone who keeps trying to cop a feel?

Curious, is X2 done, or will we be seeing more of him? And just a random thought, but are all of Becky's Lexicon family history, I mean it might be interesting if there were a cousin or something floating around somewhere. I wouldn't have Becky's family catch on too quick. I mean her dad is practically the king of oblivious.

Anyway, great stuff so far, I'll let you know when the pic gets done, but it'll probably be a while. Oh and about the dunking, Violet so didn't deserve that. :)

Oh, nothinmg much. Just a silly little scene of Violet getting kidnapped and accidentily zapped with the lust ray. Wordgirl rescues her, but has some difficulty dealing with a sex crazed Violet mid flight. I'll leave the rest to your imagination. On a related note, I currently have a pic request pending from an artist. It involves Wordgirl and VIolet sharing a kiss mid flight, based on a screen grab fro the Birthday Girl ep. When the pic is done I could send you the link to it, if you're interested.

Oh, the royal guard are an interesting. But, remember, you saould the Lexiconian royal were somehow special. So, even though the royal guard have similar powers to Wordgirl and Mathwhich, they shoudln't be quite as strong as Becky.

Are the royal guard going to show up on Earth again? I could picture some rather amusing scenes of Becky getting fed up with having them follow her around all the time.

Now we're talking. This is getting good. Though I do hope we see more of the lust ray being used on Becky and Tim. Oh, out of curiousity, does the lust ray only work on Becky Tim and X2? Or could it effect other people, like Violet for instance? As I've been reading this story, I've been getting this hilarious little image in my head of Violet accidentily being hit with the lust ray somehow, and getting into a rather akward situation with Wordgirl. Just a thought.

Glad to see your back writing again. But a couple of things I should point out.

1: You might want to give weapon x2 a bit of a makeover. I'm sorry, but having him look just like Mathwhiz except for a different outfit and red glowing eyes just screams evil twin syndrome.

2: No, offense, but so far Weapon x2 is coming off as a bit of a wuss. I mean sure he got Mathwhiz down, but one cheap shot from Wordgirl and Mathwhiz has him by the throat? This guy was apparantly designed to be some sort of unstopable fighting machine. Wordgirl and Mathwhiz combined should barely be able to make a dent in this guy.

And it might help if you have him demonstrate exactly how tough he can be. Maybe tear up a good sized chunk of the city, or put some people in the hospital? In the end, Mathwhiz and Wordgirl should beat him by outwitting him instead of out muscling him. Heck, most of the time Wordgirl outwits her enemies anyway.

3: Just a little fun fact. If this guy has the same genetic structure as MathWhiz, then technically, shouldn't that little lust ray Mr. Big invented work on him, too? Just a thought.

You sholdn't have to change it. Just say that Beck is something she prefers to reserve for her close friends.

I'm definitely watching this story. Oh and in Lady Redundant Woman Violet called Becky Beck and she didn't care.

I'm still here. Just a tip, this is ADULTfanfiction, you should of had a little smut by now. Still a good story though.

i'm not a big fan of wordgirl's show, (it's just ok in my book) but i am interested in this story and would like to see it continue. It's well written, & i like that they're from waring planets. Nice work please continue with this.