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Yeah, that's the guy. As for names, anything that sounds like a grunt or battle cry will do fine. Just keep it to two syllables or less.

Heh, now things are REALLY picking up. Poor Tobey, run ragged by a one year old. Let's just hope the other villains don't find out about this, he'd never hear the end of it. I like our new barbarian friend. By any chance have you ever heard of a comic book character called Lobo? Just curious.

Not bad, so far. Man, I have no idea how Becky is going to fix this mess. She's gonna have to try to organize some kind of long term government.

Not a bad start, thought you may want to lay off the xenophobia. After all Lexicon and Decimal did just join forces to fight off an invasion. Oh I'm sure there'll always be some resentment, but for the most part I think the people of Lexicon would be a bit more concerned with making sure their planet doesn't go down the toilet.
Oh, and this is probably just me, but, Plucky? Come on.

Oh, yes, reign in a bunch of egos by putting EACH of them in a position of power. Mr. Big will NEVER learn. Hmm, Arabian Bomber messing with a super powered baby. Why do I get the feeling he's bitng off more than he can chew? Apparantly no one ever told him that female predators are most dangerous when protecting their young.

It's ok, like I said it fit the situation. Oh yeah, that was classic. And Becky thought she had her hands full before. Ooh, energy monster, this should be fun. Just remember, static electricity is NOT friendly to hair dos. Oh quick tip. Becky may be a walking dictionary, but not everyone else is. You might want to lighten up on the Skater Lingo, or at least provide a few definitions.

Hee, oh that was fun. The new battle cry really fits. Though I question the wisdom of shouting it at night, in a house full of sleeping people and a sleeping baby in the same room. Hoboken Diamond? Man, talk about random. Thought you get the idea Carina was just trying to be part of the conversation. Don't worry about TJ. He learn to accept it in time, he just needs a while to adjust.

Maybe Carina could help out? TJ could get roped into helping with the baby sitting and a cute little baby is hard for ANYONE to pass up. I wonder if Carina will start trying to walk first, or if she'll just go straight to flying and learn how to walk later. Heh, I can just see Mrs. Botsford casually walking down the hallway with an armload of laundry, humming to herself. Only to look up, shriek and duck ans Carina zooms past. Man that such potential for comedy.

I like the new one. It takes a bit longer, but it lets each one represent themselves as an individual before they represent themselves as a team. Ok, I have to say it, CAT FIGHT! Seriously, we need a knock down, drag out between Grann mady, Lady Redundant Woman, Phantasma and Wordgirl, quick. I can see Math Whiz, just standing there, speechless.

Speaking of missing out on things, what happened to the narrator? I know it's your story, be he's a character in his own right on the show. Alas, poor huggy, gone from superhero sidekick to resident babysitter.

I'm not sure I like the idea of the whole drug war thing. Even with the whole slightly darker tone of your series, it just doesn't seem right for Wordgirl to go there. Remember, drug addiction has long lasting consequences that you'll have to deal with later on down the line. You know, I know could see Mr. Big admitting that Big Mama has gone too far and somehow sabotaging the drugs, or paying someone to craft an antidote.

On another note, this is now the thirtieth review for this fanfic. Although all but two of them are from me. I'n not sure if that's wonderful, or just a bit scary.

You could just have hime get disable somehow, or just so shocked by what he's seeing that he's stunned. Heh, it'd hilarious if the Huntress came along making osme kinda announcement that she was gonna grab Math Which, and Bam, out of nowhere she gets sucked into the middle of the brawl.

I don't think we should get rid of Two-Brains. He's one of the best villains on the show. Without him, it just wouldn't be the same. And you know most of the time Two-Brains isn't really that nuts. It's only when the mouse brain really gets going that he REALLY gets out of control. In a way, Two-Brains is almost like an addict himself, though mostly the mouse side.

Heh, Jeff REALLY needs to find a hobby, or a sense of direction.

Heh, nice commentary on the quality of the milk, let's hope her throwing arm isn't TOO good, yet, we wouldn't want any broken windows. It's kinda fitting that Two-Brains sohuld be the main focus for a while. They said on the show that he considers himself to be Wordgirl's top enemy.

Oh man, what a scene. Wordgirl trying to fight off a suped up Mouse Robot, with her mom trying to jack off in the background? Can you say distracting? Typically babies ususally stick to basic stuff like mama or dada for their first words. But in Carina's case it could be just about anything. Fun fact: In the comic strip Baby Blues, Hammie McPherson's first words were yelling dump truck at the top of his voice.