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Hey, I've been reading this story forever and i thought id post another comment like the one on the DT Files. I really enjoy your writing, You are probably my favorite writer on here, thanks for the entertainment dude.
Keep it up.

I laughed, I cried, I was really in love with this story. Man, you're good.

Becky and Huggy collapse on the bed exhausted. Wow, that sentance sounds so messed up out of context. Well one fanfic might be coming to an end, but there's always room for others. Maybe a fanfic about a teenage Carina battling crime on Mars.

You just had to throw in alien tentacle monsters, didn't you? No I don't think Wordgirl could kill again. Look back at all the agony Wordgirl went through last time. True it was justified in defense of Carina, but having to kill someone tore her apart. Doing that again could destroy Becky completely.

Well the founding of the colonies on Mars might make a good wrap up. Becky takes note that her world is getting bigger, but so is the group of people she can depend on. Man I can see that Tim has some explaining to do. I only hope there's something left of Tim afterwards.

Maybe we could end it with a little epilogue. Carina, now a teenager herself, has taken up as the Wordgirl of mars with Arianna in a sort of Huggy role?

Ah, Wordgirl gets to explore the wonderful world of beauracracy. First off minor nitpick it's not go between person, it's just go between. Second, I hate to say it, there is no way in hell Lexicon and Decimal will be able to build military bases on Mars's moons, it's simply not going to happen.

There's a couple of resons for this. First, as you said Earth controls thel Sol system, which is what it's called by the way. There's no way in hell they'd allow other planets to have full sized military instaliations in their place, treaty or no treaty. It's nothing person, it's common sense.

Second, Wordgirl would never allow it. Thjs is suppose to be a peaceful union and the idea of having armed Lexicon and Decimal soldiers on Mars goes against everything she stands for. I know Lexicon is mostly a democracy now, but that doesn't mean they want to piss off their empress. In fact Earth shouldn't have a full military base their either.

The presence on Mars should focus mainly on exploration and discovery, with token military outposts focusing on defense. Oh, one thing about Tobey's mom watching the baby, Violet has parents, too. Oh and for the records stalker never say they're stalking someone. They just believe they're pursuing an innocent relationship. They don't see themselves as actually doing anything wrong.

That being said, I could see a certain girl borrowing a certain suit of battle armor and using it to get Tim's attention. Seriously, do Tim and Becky even know about that thing yet?

Great way to wrap up the season. Just one issue though. Earth may not have advanced technology, but Mars is in their solar system and rightfully belongs to them. I know the Earth itself doesn't have the ablity to state the claim, but Wordgirl does. She's not going to let Earth get swept aside so casually.

She'll make it clear in no uncertain terms that Lexicon and Decimal may have a colony there, but it still belongs to Earth. Heck Wordgirl could even insist that humans be transported to Mars to found a Earth colony. Of course being an important individual Wordgirl could act as a go between for Earth and the Colony. Just an idea. That could be a potential focus for the new season, Establishing the Earth colony and reactions of people living on Mars.

No, they have business of their own to deal with and a lot of messes to clean up.

She was breathing normally and even talking casually with the narrator. It was one of the early shorts. Ah, that's the problem with empires, the rulers always have to be watching their backs. Could this be the start of a new beginning for Zaniah, or won't it be so easy for her to change her ways?

This provides an interesting twist. If even they manage to take Calipso down Mars would still be terraformed and potentially liveable. Here's a thought, maybe Caelum and Emma could start work on a colony there. Maybe governing a colony could finally give caelum some focus in his life.

Even if they manage to push callisto back Zaniah is going to have her hands full trying to take back her empire. There's still a long road ahead for her. Heck if she tried Wordgirl might even be able to arrange a treaty between dimensions.

Nice touch with the lust cannons. Reminds me of an episode of Star Trek where the entire crew was infected with a bacteria that made them all act drunk. Rather surprising that Caelum and Emma got married like that with no one else around.

Still I can understand it, they still have a lot to do, there was only time for a quick ceremony. Maybe after Zaniah is taken care of they'll go back and do it right? I suppose the Huntress could care less about it though.

Oh interesting note, Wordgirl has stood, unproected, on the surface of the moon before. Presumably she can breath in space. And if she can, so can Tim and the X weapons. Perhaps the best way to deal with Zaniah is at the source. After all the fastest way to kill a snake is to cut off the head.