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by gaaramonster

person ladieaj
schedule February 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story is good, but I think you'd benefit from an editor or a beta reader; someone to point out and fix grammatical mistakes. It would make the whole thing a lot easier to read.
schedule January 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good fanfic. I like how they don't just go right into it.