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for Gwen T(aking)10

by Tabris666

schedule April 8, 2022 at 12:00 AM

This is an interesting idea, and you could make a nice story from it.  But your grammar is so brutally bad that I couldn't read it. 

You need to learn how to write proper sentences, capitialize and use punctuations.  As it is, your writing is unreadable.