(Chapter 8)
It was quite a surprise to see Lily getting in on the action so directly, perhaps proving the title of that infamous lemon fanfic... Great job describing how Lily treated her brother without using the word suckling and risking making it creepy ;) – yet still planting the idea that Rita is a bit of a freak too. Guess we know where the kids get it from. Also, revealing the flashback and Lily's offer of future relief was pretty funny too.*
Letting Luan's vulnerability show and play a bit, plus her resisting a joke at the end, was pretty touching (“Heh!”) and added some warmth to their forbidden incestuous liaison. Going monster-to-monster (“Talk about bumping nasties!”) was a cute way to offer a solution to Luan's hesitation. Despite being a straightforward chapter it still had all the charm and lust as the other chapters. Yet apparently there is a lot more to come than expected! Thanks for more sexy and very Loud fun.
* Though we're only taking Luan's word that she can understand Lily and didn't just train her with sweets and/or or a free pass on April Fools Day. (I'm guessing that was mentioned in an episode sometime after I stopped watching.)
(Chapter 7)
Heh, one has to wonder if you were influenced by those oh-so many (requested) pictures of Leni and Luna kissing Lincoln on the cheek from either side. Regardless, it's nice to know that even with the source of the nightmares identified that the fun will keep on happening. (Also have to love the idea that banging leads to… well, banging.) It'll be interesting to see what Luan is planning, though maybe Leni and Luna agreed to help speed up the jokester's turn precisely because they didn't want her coming up with anything special that would make Lincoln suffer.
Anyway, Leni is so cute with her sweet naïveté and cute way of finding a kind answer even when she doesn't understand, though the idea of her in a three-way with Luna and Lincoln then schlicking off to them going at it is pretty great too. That being said, Lincoln's little reactions to the idea that there's now a schedule and whatnot is fun too; and I was half-expecting his concerns about Rita to be answered with, “She gets every-other Sunday.”
Adding in a bit of a lesson about what Awake-Lincoln's problems were made for a nice transition as he figured out the right beats to make some beautiful music with Luna. (Besides, she's the most-likely to give it to him straight if it had been a lackluster performance, both because of her matter-of-fact style and the fact that she has more options.)
Of course, even if the pipes are no longer calling, there's still the issue of what created this Sex Monster embodiment of Lincoln's desires — and why Lincoln wants to give it credit for the lessons that Dream Jordan, Dream Ronnie Anne, and Dream Paige had been teaching him. (Yes, it's all Lincoln in reality... but if he ever has a personality-split like in Superman III then things could get real awkward real fast. :D ) It'll be fun to see what else is revealed as Lincoln "makes everything okay" for his remaining sister (or sisters?).
Thanks for another great chapter of how the Loud children are making the hot weather seem chill by comparison.
(Chapter 6)
First off, I'm very relieved that Clyde wasn't involved with the sexy part of the dreams, though I guess we don't know if the "monster" was just trying to get him out of the way or if it will want to experiment. (I guess you could say, “When it comes to Clyde it left itself an opening … or two!” LUAN! GET OUT OF MY COMMENT!)
On the other hand, it was nice to see Paige joining the dream team, and even more fun to have Lynn take on the real-life version. Kind of funny that Lincoln's fumbling in the morning was more from not having "the monster" to help him than any residual hesitance to commit incest... so much incest... Also it's great that Lynn was up for seconds since, with her enthusiasm, he'll have a chance to work on all his moves which he's only mastered subconsciously so far – and I'm guessing that will be pretty important for any other sisters besides Lisa who start making a habit out of their brother's cock. (Surely those facts are more clues too.)
Thanks yet again.
Really enjoying this fic. I look forward to more from you!
And then there were four with Lynn up next.
I was surprised at this chapter since I figured Lincoln would be to ashamed to ask Lisa for help and that she would pay him a night time visit too.
But I was really surprise with Lisa going all the way with Lincoln since I figured she would use other means to pleasure him since he was hypnotized and all. Still now I can't help but wonder if Lisa had something to do with the nightmares and her siblings taboo late night acts. Hell will she be the reason in the possible sequel of why girls outside the family will want a taste of Lincoln too? Will she try it first with her friend Darcy?
And will the twins and Lucy want to go all the way with Lincoln too since chances are they probably don't want to fall behind their little sister Lisa. And will this story end with a sibling sleep together in which Lisa hypnotizes Linc again and unleashes his inner sex monster?
Chapter 5 - SPOILERS!
Much as I loved the wonderfully rough & needy sex between Lisa and Lincoln, this whole chapter seems kind of weird to me.
At times I had suspected that Lisa may be involved with the genesis of Lincoln's "problem," and a few things she mentioned could be evidence of that: She mentioned that she started making sex toys for herself about the time that all of this started: perhaps she was affected by the erotic noises but not by whatever is causing the initiating nightmares; but her comments suggest that she was preparing for sexual intercourse with Lincoln right from the start. More so, she seemed pretty pleased (even a bit blasé) to have released Lincoln's "sex monster" facet, without any need for suitable dream girls to get his motor running out of control.
Still, I'm sure that once the Freddie and Daphne rip off those Jordan and Ronnie Anne masks* Velma will explain it all perfectly. It just seems like a very hard shift from the usual pattern. There's still a hint of the hard physical torture having something to do with it… and with the weekend we'll see if that affects the cycle further.
Most of all, the hot action and sweet sexy preteen mystery is still very enjoyable. Lisa's asides about how often she hypnotizes him, "collecting samples," etc. all fit nicely too. Also cool to reinforce the idea that the nightmares are real and create a bit of clingy behavior in the first place. It makes for a very fun mystery along the way, especially since most of the clues involve hot sex scenes. So thanks for more sexy fun with the Loud kids.
* “Moonbeam and Eclipse!”
You will be making love to Lucy that's what you're gonna be doing
So Lisa is next? Why does that make me think of another story?
I love how you had Lori act, reminds of the first Loud episode Left in the Dark, how she wanted to stay with Lincoln.
Though I can't help think that Lori or maybe Leni will end up lending Lincoln to their friends. That would be an interesting turn of events.
(Chapter 4: Literally Nothing Happened)
First off, how long will it take Lincoln to realize the sheer weirdness of Lori explaining – specifically by names – that all of his older sisters are using somewhat-foolproof birth control? It would have been one thing if Lori had mentioned that Rita (or Lynn Sr.) had pushed the option when each sister hit puberty, but this "just in case" almost seemed like Lori was giving him a checklist; better yet, by not mentioning the younger sisters at all she left good reason for Lincoln to keep being tense about his earlier sexual encounters.
Of course, things are so wonderfully weird for Lincoln already that what's a little foreshadowing going to hurt? :D Besides, he kept his promise to himself that none of his little sisters would be sleeping with him that night. He can be happy about that, right?
Anyway, it was a nice twist to see Lori going to Lincoln in her insecure moments, both for the sake of having someone who can comfort her and, well yes, for the sweet hot action. Lincoln's way of getting her to open up about her bad dream while maintaining her ego was pretty sweet too; I especially like how he had Lori "hold Bun-Bun for me.' The What Would Clyde Do Besides Bleed to Death? was pretty funny as well.
Now I can't help but wonder if the cruelly-physical day camp thing has some role in Lincoln's sudden popularity, though my instincts tell me that something is affecting his sisters as well, and since only some of them are involved in the torture camp that's likely not it. (If it turns out to be the grass then you can be damned sure I'll be re-seeding my lawn!) At least whatever it is also gives Lincoln some good dreams to get things started, and no surprise that he'd keep falling for Jordan's and Ronnie-Anne's "tricks" in that regard. Jordan's comment about Lincoln's lack of resistance seems like an important clue.
Awesomely powerful sex scene, not least of all for Lori clearly wanting it from the moment Lincoln realized it was her. It's still not 100% clear that the girls are the ones initiating the sexual activity, but it really does seem like they're setting him up each time. Again, it will be fun to discover the truth. (Just check Luan's tapes? ;) ) Kind of an important change that, this time, Lincoln can't deny that he wants to have sex with Lori again, regardless of the "wrongness" (never mind the shame & fear he's going to feel anyway). Also it's a bit sweet that he'd think of Bobby's feelings too, even in the moment of passion.
BTW, Phineas and Ferb wholeheartedly approve of your use of erg in a sexual context. (Like they'd every complain about your writing!)
Thanks for another fun chapter, and for hooking me even more.
(Chapter 3: It Came in the Night)
Well, at least two came in the night. Lucy was extra-cute as she feigned her own happy dream as an excuse to get off on her horny brother. And as sweet as she tries to be, the idea that each sister he gets hot & heavy with seems to tell another has got to be pretty horrifying to the boy; Now we'll have to see if Lucy repeats the pattern, and with whom. (Okay, I usually try to avoid looking at the hint but couldn't avoid it this time. :) ) It's also nice to see dream Ronnie Anne standing in for Lucy's more-assertive approach to the somnambulistic sexiness. Thanks.