Just finished chapter 5.
Oh man... I know what's going to happen and it hurts. Boss, I love your writing, but this one... I completely don't know how you feel about it. I'm conflicted. It is super well written, though a few spelling and grammar errors here and there. But I've never read anything so blatantly morally wrong, without easing and slowly progressing to that point. But sure, I just have to believe that Ann is a psychopath. I'm this far already, all in I guess.
Keep up the good work.
Chap 5 was...pretty dull. Way too much realtionship stuff and I guess...trying to justify whats coming? Really not necessary. Looking forward to the next chap.
I have no idea how you can make this work outside of murder, but I'm sticking around to find out.
Well i did not expect for this to turn dark, both from Kim's and Ann's sides, gotta feel kinda bad for Ron, caught between frying pan and fire and having all his feelings dashed away like that. Maybe it would be best to just give Kim what she wants, and after she realizes how different things are in the 'adult' world, show her what she threw away, possibly after Yori already 'mended' Ron's wounds.
Will Kim be able to feel everything while she's asleep, will she be conscious during the whole thing but tied down so she can't escape or conscious but can't move because her body is paralyzed although doesn't stop the feeling of what Ron and her mom are doing to her body?
Forgot to add since her mom is a doctor will Anne use an Aphrodisiac on Kim, Ron or both to make sure that by the end of the night Kim is without a doubt pregnant?
Chap 4, very nice, sexy. I can't wait for Anne to go farther. Kim needs a deep and thorough exam.
Chapter 3.
Hmm... I think the hardest thing I have to do when wrapping my head around this is Ann. This is such an extreme departure from her usual character. I don't hate the premise of this story. And I don't dislike Ann's character. It is just jarring. I think if you had just passe into the premise just a little bit, or maybe give Ann a moment of second thought and confliction it would be less jarring. Because right now, Ann is a psychopath.
All in all though I guess once you've gotten this far in the story, you can honestly just get over how fast she made the decision that lead to this story.
Great chapter, though I noticed a few spring and grammatical errors, but I don't recall where. It must've just been one or two.
Loved it especially when Kim swallowed her food unknowingly with Ron cum on it but moaned from the new enjoyable taste right in front of him, that would make any guy hard. Could that happen again or while Kim sleeps Ron gives Kim a mouth full of cum while she sleeps and Kim wakes up with the same delightful taste in her mouth, finally will there be any BDSM, idea example Kim blindfolded handcuffed and her body tied up in rope, while Kim is asleep through the whole thing her mind, body and heart is being subconsciously trained to belong to Ron as his submissive. From his voice, touch and what he does to her body with BDSM, to obey his commands whatever it is regardless how humiliating it is. This could be what Ron wants to make happen as the sight of Kim this way truly submissivley helpless despite being asleep is very hot making Ron want to claim Kim as his and do the things to her just as he recently fantazised by looking at her like this all the more.
If this idea goes with your story please use it please
Chap 3, disappointed about Ron being the guy, but ah well. Looking forward to more of Kim being bred and hopefully some Anne/Kim fun.