Amazing A+
Wow, I just read your story and was amazed. I certainly wasn't expecting such hardcore degradation but I like how you went into detail to tie the thought processes of the girls into it. I like how you arent afraid to take your writing to where you want it to go to fulfill the character you are presenting.
There were a couple things you added that per my personal taste I didn't care for. And there were a couple things I was hoping for that you ended up glossing over. But over all I really enjoyed reading the two chapters you have here. The writing is solid with grammar that flows and only an occasional typo. And your use of imagery is very effective. Morality aside I'd say this is a story you should be proud of.
I hope that you continue writing whether it be this story or any other.
~Haunter Rayne
Can't wait to see the rest of the friends fall under the sex magic spell
Your stories are one of the best but this storie I want to read more and more. I just can't wait for next chapter.
Ok now I want to see more of this story