continue, please
continue, please
I wonder just how wild it's gonna be
Great chapter, though it looks like Lincoln is laying down on the job, as he is not tiring them out nearly enough. Since the girls are required to make the rounds to ALL the judges does that mean Lana and Lola are going to flip a coin for who takes on Lincoln as their final customer for the night or is Lynn going to prove she's a team player?
I hope Lana & Lola vist Lincoln
This story seems pretty interesting. I always wondered, in a world where the Loud House got lewded, what would happen if Lincoln got roped into one of Lola's pageants and had to fuck his way out of the situation.
But here, it gets deeper than that. Not only is what I just said in this story, but the entire pageant is in on it rather than it being just some quirky something or another. Now Lincoln has to deal with all sort of things; the immorality of it all, giving his sister an edge while trying not to be revealed to be a kid, etc. Then there's the matter here, where Lolly's "uncle" is gonna do the same thing Lincoln was told to do. My only guesses are that Lola's gonna change out with Lana in that regard, or they're going to have to get creative somehow.
All I know is, I'll gladly see the next one.
I thought lolly had a fetish for being used for sex fucked after all isn't what all the girls are doing to win
Lincoln needs to give Lola a turn maybe the winner will pick a guy to have sex with live on stage or maybe in the contract that it states that the girls gotta sleep with all judges
The new chapter was really something. Since I've already given my thoughts mainly on the story itself, I thought this time I'd just make some quick comments on what really jumped out at me. First of all, I really liked the description of Lincoln's anxiety, how he froze up so much that he just went back to calm. That bit was fun and so was the mindless flirt he gave Misty. The 'do some slapping herself' line was got a smile out of me, and I liked how you invoked Lola and Leni to display how Lincoln could tell the difference between a phony smile and a real one. That was effective use of two present sisters.
While we're talking about good lines, the four years junior/four years senior wordplay was also quite satisfying to read. And speaking of the dances, boy, they were certainly intense. I was not expecting you to describe the elaborate choreography so deeply. They were particularly great at putting the reader in the position of Lincoln and leaving us sympathizing with him; for my part I felt just as flustered and out-of-sorts as he did, and it's always great when you can make the reader feel what the character is feeling. That's one of the most elegant things you can do as a writer, I think. Lastly, what might have been my favorite part of this chapter was the explanation for why Luna wrote that song. As I read the lyrics I found myself wondering how on earth Lola got her to write something so lewd, whether she was in on the pageant, basically what the heck was going on, but the explanation was perfect and felt so, so true to the characters themselves while adding a dark, saucy little touch to the proceedings.
In the end I can't help but look forward to finding out more: about Lola's feelings for Lincoln, which you lightly hinted at in this chapter, about the rest of the sisters feelings about what they've involved themselves in and about what some of the more unscrupulous girls might do to try and win 'Uncle Herb's' vote. Very nice update, man. And again, heck of a job with those song lyrics. I'm not sure I've ever seen a really tightly written original song in a fic before, let alone two!
Will Lincoln have sex with Lola in the next chapter?
Lincoln, slowly make your way to the nearest exit, and call the police o_o
Great beginning Mr. Glass, I can't wait for chapter 2.