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for An Incredible Valentine

by TheEvilFaery

schedule December 23, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Some of the things I liked: 
-The "I'm all bulgy" reference to that Simpsons episode where Homer visits the third dimension.
-That Bob's superhuman toughness makes the cupid-arrow bounce right off his head. And the crazy ricochet afterward was wonderfully cartoonish.
-"Everything tasted pink for a second."
-Violet using her forcefields to pull buttons off of Helen's top
-Violet being invisible, which I suppose helps explain her boldness
-Violet confessing that she doesn't know what to do after she gets her mom's clothes off.
-Helen altering the shape of her tongue to more thoroughly eat out her daughter.
-The hot mother-daughter incest in general.
-The happy ending, infant abduction and all :-).

person Anon
schedule September 25, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Everything was so on point for this I don't even know where to begin!

The slow sensual buildup was so satisfying when things finally picked up, Helen and Vi felt so unbelievably real and in character; like I could very easily visualize their personalities through the dialogue; which is something I'm not graced to often in smut. :)

Do you accept commissions by any chance? I'd be more than happy to see another story like this from you.

person Oric13
schedule November 12, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Good story, well written.

Although with Helen Parr involved I was kinda expecting her to use her powers to turn her clit into a dick or something and take Violet's virginity, and even though I'm not usually into futa I was still kinda disappointed that this didn't happen. :p

schedule September 9, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Need more of this.  Well written.  I want to see Helen take Vi's cherry with her tongue.  Needs more chapters!

schedule September 7, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Big fan, hope to see more like/of this