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by ItwasMerlin

person Anonymous
schedule May 5, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Nice scene, even though it was not willingly, she still got off from riding Mildew. Making it one step closer until she finally submits. 

Are you going to put in a Mildew and Heather sex scene? After making Astrid think he will uphold his end of the deal, he still goes and has sex with Heather.

Have Heather do things he would want Astrid to do; suck him off, ride him, get filled up. And the best part, Astrid is standing outside when she saw Heather walking up to Mildew's hut. And instead of getting angry with Mildew for going back on the deal, she gets angry at Heather for taking what was her's. Then the next night; she goes back, not saying anything after Mildew opens the door, she pushes him to his bed, strips down nude, takes out his cock and rides him until morning. She keeps calling herself his "whore" or "slave", turning him on even more that he turns them until she is lying beneath him, but she is still enjoying what belongs to her. 

person Anonymous
schedule May 3, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Not bad, very good. Mildew has set a new goal for mastering Astrid's girlfriend. I am interested in this course of the narrative.

person Anonymous
schedule May 3, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Is Astrid finally going to break and willingly has sex with Mildew after he had sex with Heather? 
 

Maybe do a scene where Mildew has sex and impregnates all of his new sex slaves. And they do it during a trip for half a week or a whole week in a house at another island, where it is very secluded 

person Dragon
schedule May 1, 2022 at 12:00 AM

This chapter is interesting, I'm not one of those who want Mildew to fuck everyone, honestly I just want to see how things happen between Mildew and Astrid, and how the blonde lets herself be completely consumed by desire. Hopefully the next chapter will show us a bit of this jealousy of Astrid and how Mildew will take advantage of it to take her to bed once again.

person Anonymous
schedule May 1, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Oh heather's here? Yeah I'm gonna need that next chapter asap 

person Merlin
schedule April 30, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Hi Paul- you can share on here or you can mail me at merlinitwas@gmail.com 

I shouldn't really reply on reviews as they get a little annoyed but feel free either way 

person Paul J
schedule April 29, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Hi Merlin,

I have a story line i would like to share with you re Astrid / Mildew in your great sory " what is wrong with me?" .... is this review page for everyone to see or do you read them privately and then put select ones out for public consumption ? .. I am not sure that you would use a story line once it has been seen by everyone ... cheers 

person Falcon
schedule April 24, 2022 at 12:00 AM
person Merlin
schedule April 18, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Merlin here. Thought I would chime in . (Although it may get deleted.) 

Massive thanks to the amazing amount of reviews that have flooded in. Gives me more push to write. It seems people are already planning the final and it to be finished . I wasn't planning an end just yet lol 

I am working to get the next chapter out . I've already wrote one chapter but it's got nothing sexual and I want this to have its next part ready . 

Love the ideas and hold tight may be a while but when I've spare time I do go straight to writing this . 

Thanks again 

Merlin

person Solis Mirk
schedule April 17, 2022 at 12:00 AM

I started to read this great story only recently, I hope the next chapter will arrive soon.

As for suggestions, I think it's time for Astrid to finally willingly submit. Mildew can force her to admit what she felt watching them the previous evening. Then, he can oblige her to continue to watch the theesome, forbidding her to masturbate until Astrid accepts to have sex with him without the use of the stone.

I have also a final scene for the story: Astrid and Valka are pregnant with Mildew's children. They are fucking with Mildew in front of Hiccup, humiliating him. Hiccup starts to masturbate saying: "Wha's wrong with me?"

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