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by ItwasMerlin

schedule March 15, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I'm guessing this story is dead then, What a shame :(

schedule August 4, 2017 at 12:00 AM

You know in this last chapter would have been even better if the choice was to suck Mildew in the village under the power of the stone, in wich case she could at least say she was controlled, or voluntarily suck the 'stranger' without any command, so she'd know she's doing it herself. Actually it could become quite the game, do something that could get her discovered, but under the stone's influence, or do something voluntarily in the privacy of the cove. Also i have quite a funny idea: why not order her to strip completely naked before coming to the cove every morning, and she cannot cover herself until she's back home after her training, some forced nudity coupled with the thrill of *unwanted* exhibitionism would do wonders for her attitude.

person wanon2015
schedule August 1, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Hey i really enjoyed this chapter. r u going to hve mildew and astrid meet each other next chapter or sooner?

schedule July 29, 2017 at 12:00 AM

It was good, glad to see more.  Definitely too long since last update.  Keep up the sex and domination.  Try to give Astrid as much pit and pubic hair as possible, she should be a natural gal.  Looking forward to more. She needs regular deep-throat training.

schedule July 29, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I think Astrid should keep herself trimmed or at the request of mildew wax it so it stays bald.

schedule July 28, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Not bad, wish new chapters would come (haha) more often

schedule July 28, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Loved it, maybe the next day when Astrid wakes up the next morning she feels disgusted with herself because at the same time while knowing she has full control of her movements her body seemed to ache to feel the same rough treatment he gave her while demeaning her with words that slowly wring true every session they have or hiccup was the one that called Astrid a cold cunt which disguise mildew called Astrid but doesn't believe him until while on the other island she accidentally overhears what hiccup called her, Astrid heart broken and the only one who could make her feel better was the mysterious masked man, when she see's him again Astrid tells him at this point she'll be what he wants her to be and do anything he wants without question and/or hesitation like live with him forever because all Astrid wants right now is to feel nothing but the pleasure he gives her body and call her those sweet demeaning words that now make her body ache to be used like one which is now who she is and says she wouldn't care even if all this time it was mildew and Astrid would make herself disappear leaving no trace of her ever existing except leaving her dragon alive. (Even mildew is not that cruel to force her to kill it) Astrid just wants to feel so much pleasure that she forgets her past and everyone including her dragon except for mildew so she can begin her new life in eternal pleasure with mildew as his slutty whore of a wife. Do you think you could combined both ideas, of course all this'll be further down the road but it would make great reading only if this works with what you have in mind for the story?

person Just a fan
schedule May 27, 2017 at 12:00 AM

The Mildew/Astrid pairing is so strange it works . Much like your odd pairings this one is also great .

My hopes for the story ? Astrid becomes the old man's sex slave willingly and loved every minute of it . Clearly she likes the humiliation even if it's thoughts she doesn't understand . 

Obviously you've just updated your castle one , love it by the way , but please update this soon aswell .

schedule April 16, 2017 at 12:00 AM

well here's a real twisted thing: instead of seeing the masked man even when Mildew wears no mask, make her see one of her friends everytime she looks at him

schedule April 15, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Great work, the slow burn will definitely be worth it when mildew gets Astrid to give up her free will willingly to her new life with her new master mildew so I'm looking forward to Astrid's humiliation and is Astrid's heated disappointed about mildew dening Astrid her next climax while she was on the edge?