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Very good new story. I hope that Janna will be let down easy or Star will find someone else for Marco because it is SO obvious that Janna is into him in the show.

I really enjoy the pacing you've got going on, nothing feels rushed or forced. Loved Tom's and Janna's scenes, can't wait to see how an aggressively forward girl like Janna will throw a wrench into the main duo's plans, and the humor between Tom and poor Boner was fantastic. Also I love the title of the third chapter, sounds like it could be the title of a rock song.

Disclaimer: I'm the proofreader, so all typos and such are my fault. :) For starters, I like the little recap of Marco's and Star's love-live situations, both to ease into the discussion and also provide enough background for those who aren't as familiar with the series. It strikes me a little that many teenagers fret almost non-stop over how to appeal those of the other sex, yet at the same time they could pretty much write a book on what they've picked up about various types of people among their own gender. If they just used some of that observational power… Yet on the other hand, there's still a hint of the blind leading the blind as both have their confidence shaken here and there. However it's awesome how they both keep perking each-other up. So it seems to be working, and I won't complain. :) Setting up the plan and negotiating the number of parts was perfectly in-character and rather adorable on both kids' parts. It ran rather smoothly, thanks to the small number of entries; the last item though is great for proving that this is going to be one hell of a sexy story. Thank goodness Mewni is a bit more liberal about sex. :) Also, Star's line “If you need to measure it, it’s not awesome.” still cracks me up. :lol: Then the restless night and all that deliciously sexy talk was fantastic, and it's cute that Star is not above teasing Marco a little bit as she gets him all flustered. The goings-on of chapter two played out well with each accomplishing their first checklist items so well. Marco was terrific for calming Star down after she jumped ahead on the list – especially being The List Guy, but it's clear that he cares more for Star's happiness than anything else. Perhaps even getting with Jackie Lynn, if it came to that; at the same time, I wonder if Star would also care more about her best friend succeeding. This could make for some interesting complications; Janna too seems like she'll be sticking her face into their business and raising havoc. Niiiiice. :) The subtlety of "that face" was pretty cool, though it was good you pointed it out for people like me. Also, giving us the pronunciation of Rogelio was clever and just a really nice thing to do. Finally though, another night with Marco and Star together in her room turned out rather nicely. She's such a carefree yet considerate young woman. I'm glad that for all of Marco's fretting he was able to fall asleep without ruminating on the situation too much. Let's just hope the puppies don't start crawling around inside his pajama bottoms. (Or maybe that's just what Star will claim happened… okay, maybe not in this story. ;)) So thanks for all the fun, and I'm really looking forward to seeing how this adventure goes. Thanks for sharing.

Ooooh another Star vs story, sign me up! The last story you did for Star vs was great, I'm definitely excited for more!

Chapter 1 This is really good so far. Once again I love how in character you make Star and Marco feel. This was a good place to start. Some titillating images without going to far early on. Looking forward to more

It's good to finally get a chance to read this, I've been looking forward to it ever since you were asking for help with the title in the forums(once again, glad to be of help). I'm loving the start of this, from the wingman fistbump to Star constantly bringing up her parent's sex life. I really enjoy how casual and comfortable they are around each other, even as things got awkward. As always you capture the aspects of the show that make it great just perfectly. I look forward to more.