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person Big Brother
schedule September 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Not bad but I prefer the first chapter.

I wonder who is blackmailing Jessica. Why this person is interested in Lisa?

By the way, even though Lisa has had several religious conversions, she has always believed in God. Moreover, Buddha is not exactly a deity in Buddhism.
person Anon
schedule August 26, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Really good, I didn't reallize until now that you also wrote "Girl's Night", I loved that story.

If you're worried about your English, I can beta read for you, just send me a story and I'll go over it.
person Someone
schedule August 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'd definitely want you to continue this. It was great.
person Big Brother
schedule August 17, 2015 at 12:00 AM
This is amazing.

I suggest to Shauna, Nikki or Greta as the new member.

Can you include a boy in a future episode? Bart is a good option, I imagine Lisa uncomfortable but excited by his presence.
person UberTag
schedule August 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Incredibly impressive first chapter.
Eagerly anticipate what you'll have Lisa "educate" herself on next.

You should consider sharing this in other forums (WWOEC, Fanfiction.net, etc.) to ensure it garners as much interest as possible.