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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Oh boy...I sense trouble.
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I will be frank with you man, because you deserve less than that. While I greatly enjoy how you write and portray the characters, the premise of the story isn't that attractive to me for one single reason.
The amount of Angst is unbearable.
It's not to say that the story is bad just because of that, because that would be a bold lie, and it would be unfair to you who had also make a quite good job at the portrayal of a realistic take on incest between those two on a "normal" environment. Which is to say, fated to fail and burn.
Harshly.
On that, I find that you have done a marvelous work capturing that feeling. But, it isn't my cup of tea.
I find it downright painful to read how this events are slowly and inexorably tearing apart the twins, emotionally and psychologically. It is a thrilling story at some points, yeah. Especially when they're about to risk everything to be still together... but the tune of failure hangs so heavily on the story, that it's simply painful to read their attempts to defy society to be together, and be probably destroyed in the process.
Now though, I thank you for the first story. As it was a downright gorgeous work, but I think that I'm not going to read this one...
The amount of Angst is unbearable.
It's not to say that the story is bad just because of that, because that would be a bold lie, and it would be unfair to you who had also make a quite good job at the portrayal of a realistic take on incest between those two on a "normal" environment. Which is to say, fated to fail and burn.
Harshly.
On that, I find that you have done a marvelous work capturing that feeling. But, it isn't my cup of tea.
I find it downright painful to read how this events are slowly and inexorably tearing apart the twins, emotionally and psychologically. It is a thrilling story at some points, yeah. Especially when they're about to risk everything to be still together... but the tune of failure hangs so heavily on the story, that it's simply painful to read their attempts to defy society to be together, and be probably destroyed in the process.
Now though, I thank you for the first story. As it was a downright gorgeous work, but I think that I'm not going to read this one...
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May 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
you emotional shits. When i was that age, I was waaay more crazy. the bumhole is natures contraceptive after all.
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May 6, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Will Mabel get pregnant I hope she does
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May 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Liking it so far, mate. keep up the good work
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May 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I hope they can be together
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May 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic!
I am very impressed that you have fully explained their feelings about their situation. I myself have experienced the agony of 'so close and yet so far'. In my own AFF, siblings hiding their relationship was necessary, but not that difficult since the parents were easy to fool. Not in your story! They are very perceptive!
Overall a great story! Keep up the good work!
I am very impressed that you have fully explained their feelings about their situation. I myself have experienced the agony of 'so close and yet so far'. In my own AFF, siblings hiding their relationship was necessary, but not that difficult since the parents were easy to fool. Not in your story! They are very perceptive!
Overall a great story! Keep up the good work!