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oh wow....that was an amazing bit of work mate. I'm gonna have to read this a few more times to wrap my head around this. great job!

Well the mystery deepens. We now know about the black loage, that there are 3 sprites, and something about a ring. I wish we had more details. Also I'm a little surprised that when Waldles, who seems to have mind powers, talked about the towns hidden secrets she should have mentioned the bunker or the Blind Eye group.

Also I hope you didn't just kill off Wendy she is one of my Farrel charter.

Well this is getting intersting.
From the clues in the chappter it looks like something is possessing Mabel and it wants Wendy.Also it seems that whatever is possessing her is a bit horny. I also think that Pacifica is going to show up and that this is going to become the long awaited Dipper/Harem story, i hope. Lastly it seems that Bill likes to play with his food before finishing them.

Amazing story so far. You do an incredible job of setting the scene and recreating characters, it is very impressive. Even though it had no smut in it, the first chapter is my favorite so far because I really do think that's how they would react to that situation. Not to mention, it was so funny I could not stop laughing.

Great chapter, just adored how well you managed the characters, and the developments. Enjoyed Dipper moment at "Mirror world", and what this might mean for the story in the future. It seems that Mabel is being influenced by the shawl, or what posess the shawl, also... Stan actions are doing some damage or at least, that was what hinted Bill.

Liked Lebam, and the clues she left there... obviously Bill will sooner or later attempt to kill him and the whole Pines family.

I'm also concerned, it's obvious that Mabel isn't being herself on her sexual moments, and that she's being influenced... actually I think she's that white rabbit... isn't she?

Is... Wendy suffering for what had happened? Are the Owls connected to a certain goddess... or maybe something else? Loved how Mabel reasons for wanting to be with Dipper... her reasons are sound... and well... want to know more, will there be other girls influenced by Mabel... will she also use Dipper to please other girls?

I'm intrigued and quite attracted to this story. I have been writing my own story of Gravity Falls for quite a while but it had been put on hold. Still, I'm quite satisfied with how this story is going, and what elements you're using so far.

It feels like an episode... So, good job.

Well then...once again you astound me with your ability to warp this universe. its like i'm watching an episode that was never supposed to air but can be viewed in certain places. excellent job.

wow everyone a crazy level of horny. I just hope you share it with some of the other girls.
Keep the flow going .haha flow

Interesting I must admit, glad to see that you didn't jumped right on to the sex, and had a plot here. Hope to read more of this in the future.

ohhh i can taste when somethings about to become faptastically epic. I await the next chapter with baited breath.

-Marcus Carvalho

read it a second time. this is probably the first time i've ever seen THAT subject in a story...interesting...