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I am not a OCD person just wanted to figure out what the last mandalorian words Sabine said meant. When I looked it up it came out to I (something) love (something) my brother, but if I understand your meaning it should be Ni kar'tayl gar darasuum meaning I love you my bother.

Well, its Sunday evening, local time, and I've just finished chp 3. Again. For just three chps, you've written something truly addictive. I first read this story only this last Tuesday, and this amounts to my having gone through it for like four times. Shit, I wouldn't mind having Sabine for my bed!! And when you had her `bark` in 3, I lost it myself the first time around and 'tossed' a good one. So, to be quite clear, YES, I loved this! This was the first story of yours here I've read... and it won't be the last.
And now the time to be fair. There was a few speedbumps with the spelling or syntax, and a spot here or there over these 3 where it had a feeling of being a little repetitive, so could have been written With different words, but still have the same flow. Feel 'fresher'.
And I see you've done a sequel, of which I did read once, after going through these twice here.
I could see a couple other things being fitted into this one, but you set your structure, laid out your characters and pacing, and it read so very cleanly. That you for that. There are a fair number of stories throughout AFF.net here that the writer should have just as well have Peed on their keyboard, for All the disrespect they showed any possible readers, because they just banged out words With NO THOUGHT to Any Editing, of Any Kind!!??!!!??!!!????

You most certainly took the high road to make the better effort than others.
Again, Thank You.

I really did enjoy the story! and I noticed a couple of things that I'm curious about, "glitter" from Mass Effect? also this quote, "She who controlsh the shpice, controlsh the univershe!" from Frank Herbert's Dune?

Please continue

The Dark Side got a hold on Ezra... and it seems it turned Sabine on. And her transformation into a lil Mando vixen is complete. Has a lot less shame than I expected but I'm not complaining.

Hera and Kanan is going to take some time to get used to this, but Kanan was right to take his Saber away for the time being. He's right, while it worked for the best, Sabine was in danger as he got dangerously close to falling to the Dark Side on her...

And so now, a three way relationship with Sabine in the center...

Looking forward to the sequel! Excellent work!

I LOVE this.

It's wonderful that you have started writing again. I had wrote a Sailor Moon AFF fifteen years ago, then started my Johnny Test AFF during my recovery from open heart surgery. Occasionally, I get writer's block.

Very good first chapter. Ezra needs to watch his attitude towards Sabine. His actions could drive Sabine to Maketh!

well now, that was a steamy little outing now wasn't it?

Maketh is a nudist too, huh? I like that. Wonder if she'll convert Sabine to that, to mess with the crew a bit... one certain padawan in particular. wink wink

Enjoyed the conversation both with the servant driving the speeder and also with Maketh going into her garden. sneaky trick bringing out the oranges to trick up Sabine. very observant lady, she is. And it seems Sabine is using the Obiwan Kenobi book of half truths with both Maketh and her friends. things could go wrong many directions either side when the truth comes out to Maketh and the Ghost crew.

And speaking of, Ezra knows what's going on... Does he think she's a traitor, foolish, both. Either way I imagine he's feeling angry, hurt, and betrayed right now. Should be a interesting confrontation in the near future there.

Excellent chapter, hope to see more soon!

Jarkota, just wanted to say that I thought chapter one here was quite good. I was despairing that there would be any good F/F out of rebels but you managed to do it. The idea of Sabine being a wild child sex hungry bar hopper fits well and was fun and sexy to read about. I look forward to reading more.

Now this is a good start. great job on the characters, and a different take on Maketh, which is a good thing. interested in where this is going, and what Sabine's going to do, and how the others, Ezra especially, is going to react to finding out what she's done, and seems like going to do again...

Excellent work, keep the good stuff rolling!