rate_review Reviews

This is your first piece?? Not a bad start, in that case! The run-up to the love scene was kind of quick for me... ("...That escalated quickly!"), but I think the rest of the pacing was fine, and you got the characterization spot-on. To work on: homophones (to/too and your/you're mostly).
Other than that, the plot was engaging and believable. Don't feel like you have to rush through to get to your next scene, though. Take time to flesh out the details.
Looking forward to reading the next installment,
RS

OMG such a beautiful ending....i love it....yes please write the second part............I have been awaiting your chapters......they are perfect and pure....i Love it.......

Thanks for updating chapter 9....I have been checking everyday for your next chapter.....I love your story line and were it is going.....thanks again for adding chapter 9.....now when is chapter 10 coming..... :)

Hi again...and im thankful that you did not drop the story....most people drop it.....BTW i love how you space the set of sentences....it gives the reader time to imagine the story......

thanks for updating.....awe....you had me smiling the whole time they got it going....I was waiting for that......but why did she run off.....was she planning on killing Nike for her parents death? or was she just going out for some fresh air after some nice sex.....um.....i just can not wait......OMG......This is getting good.....very good.....thanks again for you story and adding for to it.....well your details sent shivers down my spine.....very nice and detail....lol..........very nice.....thanks until you next chapter.

and what the hell.....why isn't anyone else giving a review......what I know people had read this......all well....dude or dudette Im devoted to your mind, and story.....keep it up.............Peace out

OMG....i have been waiting for your next chapter....thanks for putting it up....I love the story line....I am your devoted reader and fan.....please keep it up.....wow.....a new army....crazy......well as a women i just learned some fact about my eggs.....i read, enjoy, and well learned....thanks again...........ill be waiting

Your story is full of heart to me, bring me joy that you were the only one that included the turtle helping a mother and her children. Your words are clear, and understandable as well. I understand the writer when i read their work, and i understand you. You must be a parent yourself as I am, to write such a touching stories. I can not wait for the next chapter. I sure hope she and the children remain with them. Make the family bigger, giving it more purpose right. It sounds that Leo is developing affection toward Vicky, and i sure hope so. Why not, just because they are mystical turtles does not mean they deserve love right. I happy someone new wrote something different, and i happy for this story. So i will dream and wait for chapter 3. A year of great minds i say. Peace and love out. Thanks again for writing such a unique and interesting story line.

awesome.....wow....getting very interesting....I happy that you updated soon......nice......im so interest....i just can not wait for some love in this story between Leo and Vicky....wow the kids have regeneration ability very cool......i wonder if Donny is going to run some test on them.....