rate_review Reviews

Horrible ending to the story. It seems like you just got tired of the story and decided to do an 'everyone dies' ending.

I have to say that you have an interesting mind. You have taken aspects from several different sources and blended them into a seamless whole. This story is very dark under the surface but still manages to hold onto the light in both Ben and Gwen. I can totally see these characters taking this path in a less censored universe than man of action would allow.

I think as a writer you have potential, though you need to work on your grammar and sentence structure.

This is a great story.... The plot is great and I love the way Ben protects Gwen.

This is a gripping story. Your making the characters almost the exact opposite of what they are in the cartoon but somehow managing to make them feel like the same characters I have to applaud the skill that takes even though you could really use a beta.

but please keep in mind that people do like happy ending and I'm not just talking about one where he cums all over Gwen. :p