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January 20, 2018 at 12:00 AM
I wanted to read this, but I just can't make it through the first chapter.
Please, please try to separate individual characters' speech into different lines. Having multiple characters speaking right after each other in huge, chunky paragraphs like you are makes your story difficult to read, much less keep straight who's saying what.
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April 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love this story; and the length is insane. Hats off to you.