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for Basement Dale

by TimedWatcher

person Jeb
schedule March 5, 2019 at 12:00 AM

I feel bad that I was laughing at this story. I guess I have some sort of sick morbid curiosity. Needs a part 5. I want to see if they get caught.

person JackTorrance42
schedule October 22, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I have some suggestions:

1. Introduce the characters, don't just throw their names in

2. More details in the sex scenes

3. Make the scenes flow better

 

Other than that, it's pretty good! if you want, I am willing to help with it. 

schedule June 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Very interesting and well written, looking forwards to what else may happen to poor Connie, mayhaps dales wife joining in?

schedule March 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
um wow...i don't know if i should want to keep reading this or just walk away....good story either way
person Aysha
schedule March 19, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I feel the same way as your first review, but this does seem like the kind of thing Dale would do.