Chap4, good to read more of this even if I didn't like the later plot. Hope to read more...
hey can I be in this story
cause I could stop lawson
is good
Posted on 4chan, but in case you didn't see it:
First sentence
>Whomping isn't a verb, it's an adjective did you even watch recess?
>"Not so fast... Ashley." Lawson really bit into the fruit that was saying that name. "You still owe me one for that sock of marbles to the face." Furthering his point, he rubbed his fingers underneath his chin.
Is english your second language?
>Chapter 2 starts nowhere near chapter 1
>For what Spinelli was about to do to a friend of hers, she talked in a very procedural manner. Lawson even looked impressed.
Again, is english your second language?
>Blast! This just wasn't working.
Please stop
>"That's how it normally smells..." Spinelli corrected. "You get used to it."
I gotta say, good work here. This is very in character for Spinelli
4/10, didn't cum
I'd definitely recommend this read to any fans of the show. This author clearly knows the show very well; reading this felt like the actual characters were interacting which really pulls you into the story.
Glad to see another chap. Hope to read more soon.
I'm sorry for sounding harsh, but I have been reading books on here for years. You have some great potential, but this is not a book I would be proud of. If you want, your more then welcome to send me an email.