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November 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh I loved that part how you made June think that Jack had knocked up Miko, also I can't wait to see how she reacts when she finds out her son knocked up Arcee instead of one of the other Bots there.
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November 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting story, I'm really liking it so far (I'm also a die-hard Jack/Arcee shipper, although the latest episode did not look good for us Jack/Arcee shippers, then again, didn't look good for the bots either by the end)
I hope you continue soon, and I can't wait to see June's reaction to the truth :D
I hope you continue soon, and I can't wait to see June's reaction to the truth :D
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October 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
while this story does lose a bit with sentence structure issues and spelling, the overall plot has me hooked and I am anxious to see how this turns out.
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October 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2 review:
This was also very fun and had just the right amount of tension to keep it exciting, even without any actual sex scenes. Just a few spelling and grammar errors which were easily overlooked.
Ideas for chapter 3: Jack breaks it to his mother and there is tension again, but someone (perhaps Ratchet) brings up the fact that they are possibly the same species, only different size and base, as both worlds were created by Unicron's body.
This was also very fun and had just the right amount of tension to keep it exciting, even without any actual sex scenes. Just a few spelling and grammar errors which were easily overlooked.
Ideas for chapter 3: Jack breaks it to his mother and there is tension again, but someone (perhaps Ratchet) brings up the fact that they are possibly the same species, only different size and base, as both worlds were created by Unicron's body.
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October 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
still very good
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October 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
One thing I want to point out, Miko's 15... Rafe is the 12 year-old.
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October 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Why you hateing on Miko? Miko is the same age as Jack! just because she's more excitable about the Bots doesnt mean she's a Little Girl.
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October 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
A great chapter overall. I would like to see his mom's reaction in the next chapter. Also i found their reactions close to the show. when the kid is born i would like to see what megs would do when he finds out. Also the child could be like Sari from transformers animated.
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October 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Another groovy chapter, I'm rather enjoying the story but man do I ever wanna kick your rear for ending on a cliffhanger again!
Would be interesting to see how Wheeljack reacts to the news if you find a way to work him into the story. Also might be something to get one of the other fembots into the story from the older series. Like Elita-1 one however her name was written.
Would be interesting to see how Wheeljack reacts to the news if you find a way to work him into the story. Also might be something to get one of the other fembots into the story from the older series. Like Elita-1 one however her name was written.
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October 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love the story so far but I soooooo hate you for ending on a cliffhanger.
Really want to see the next part soon.
Really want to see the next part soon.