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Hey, I hope that you put up ch 4 soon. I've been waiting for a few months already.
Good story. best of luck with the next chapter.

Besides a repeat of the same spelling errors, not a bad chapter.

And to be honest, I really was kind of hoping that June and Miko would join in on showing Jack just how much they appreciated him.

Look forward to the next chapter and finding out whether or not I'm right about the kid being a techno organic cybertronian like in Beast Machines.

Congratulations, just one of fifty adult-fanfics have what you've done, and done well.
A good story!
Please keep writing this awesome Fic.

This is remarkable Doc, I love the direction you're headed in. I'm still waiting for the eventual conflict with Megatron and the deceptions. This should prove to be a most entertaining story. Very well written and thought out, and I enjoy how your progenitors work into cannon so seamlessly. Good job, and you claim to be Dyslexic.

I think that this is the best transformers story I have read to date. I have read other transformer stories, yet none have captured me like this one did.
I have to give you major kudos on this man. A very good job well done. Can't wait for the next chapter to come out.

another great chapter

Reviewing chapter 3:

Woo! Awesome! I'm very happy I could suggest something that would help your storytelling.

This was a very incredible chapter with a great deal of entertaining happenings in it.

This chapter was well worth the wait. I enjoyed how you portrayed the origen of Primus and unicron. Though watching the finale of season one gave me an idea. What if a small sliver of Unicron's spark survived and could move and appear like a ghost. Taking on any form he wished from human to cybertronian. What if that small sliver was the one that guided human evolution and made it posible for the two racesto mix and match. Or the ghost of unicron could reveal to megatron the secrets of the progenitors. Lastly in the G1 series sam was injured and the saved him by transfering his mind into a robot body. You mentioned that Primus cyberized a whole race maybe if you haven't thought of it you could do something similar to Jack.

Great chapter, took me longer to read that I reckoned it would.

I rather liked the talk between Jack and June about the relationship with Arcee. Something that really had me laughing though was where June makes mention of nothing getting into her lately, of course the June being a MILF jokes never got old either. Wondering what the name of the protoform will be, I am rather worried you are going to end up turning the protoform in Sari from the Animated series. (I really hate Sari, she was sooooo Mary Sue.)

hope u add more soon