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March 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Wow this was REALLY well written! (Why is it that adult fiction writers can write better than non adult ff writers?) it was really great, fun story. The characters were captured well. I would have liked to know more about the test and why it made Trianna want to see Dean. And there were a few grammatical errors. "You killed hand" sticks out in my mind followed by youthful life where I think you meant young life, as well as Trianna being "held by a strong wide hadn't" and about 2 others . I put these in here cuz I know how hard it can be to catch errors in your own work, not to embarrass you. I really loved this story!
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August 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Very Good. I hope this continues. I'd like to see where it goes. ^_^