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for Crossed Lines

by Belfry

person hot shot
schedule May 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow wonder what will Lila do now and what will happend to gill and this fic its getting better hope to see more
person ROBBIE BYRD
schedule May 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like the way you had Johnny help Jillian.
person hot shot
schedule May 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow wonder what will Susan and Mary think when they find out that gill was soo snicky to do that to Jill what will be his punishment and what will there parents do when they find out what happendkeep them coming
person hot shot
schedule May 18, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow what plans will jonny come up with and what will dark veagan do hope to see more keep it coming
person Anon
schedule May 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Gil druged jillian so I would say that it was rape if he didnt drug her she wouldnt have tought Gil was Johnny so its rape end of story Gil needs 2 die by rape
person Christopher
schedule May 10, 2013 at 12:00 AM
A good story, but I didn't like the bash against lawyers in the latest chapter and harsh punishments for all crimes do NOT cut down on the crime rate, they just encourage criminals to kill witnesses to their crimes. That's been proven many times in the past.

Also, what Gil did is nowhere near being rape in the slightest and I hope he gets off in a future chapter.
schedule May 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying this story, good work, keep it up :)
person hot shot
schedule May 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow what will happen now that this hapen what efects will gills mistake have on the test family keep them coming
person hot shot
schedule May 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow wonder what's going to happen with gill and what about jonny and his family can't wait to see keep them coming
person hot shot
schedule May 3, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow didn't see that coming its getting exsating can't wait to see what happened next keep them coming