rate_review Reviews

this was surprisingly awesome. You made the sex hot, but it also wasn't like what you normally find on here. You described the sex pretty solidly, used actual anatomy and really impressed me by not turning them into freaking porn stars. Losing her virginity was not a quick "Ouch" and followed by a rodeo routine and Ben wasn't so fantastically endowed that he would make Clydesdales turn away in shame at the sight of his genitalia. Writing virgins isn't easy, you go to far into realism and the sex isn't fun for either reader or participant, go the other way and it is feels so fake. You opted for a little more of the latter, but it wasn't so far that it made me roll my eyes. My only real criticism was that Gwen was a little out of character here. I realize that Gwen from the show would not be having incestuous relations with Ben on a log but if you write anymore of these you might try a bit harder to keep her in character, part way through she stopped feeling like Gwen; maybe it was in the dialogue as she used twat every other sentence. Aside from that, this rocked and I hope you do more. Maybe deal a little more into the forbidden attraction aspect as they have crazy sexual chemistry and tension, but would at least acknowledge that they are cousins and that what they are feeling isn't supposed to be right.

Thanks for the good read!

Wow amazing I would love to see more of this fic I seems like you could continue it in a sequal of how there summer goes after they admit their feeling just a thought

That was steamy I hope you make a sequal or at least make another story this was worth reading and I hope you update soon chow

I thought the story was pretty good but a there were a lot of spelling errors but still a great story

I would love 2 see Gwen get pregnant

Whoa, that was...great...I can't...Give me a minute to breathe.
That totally blew me away! The last Ben 10 fic I read that was this hot involved his aliens(I guess with Heatblast it was really hot). Maybe you can write something along those lines, but I understand if you don't- people have different preferences and I'm cool with that.
I did notice many misspells and grammer problems, but it didn't distract too much (and that's not the main reason why we're here anyway).
Maybe if you still have the Ben 10 bug, you can write something for the Alien Force or Ultimate Alien. Sixteen year old Gwen is scrumptious, with that ponytail and stockings. Gotta love a girl with glowing eyes.
Thanks and keep it up, I'll check out your TT story soon. Bye, silverlining990

this rocked write more pls