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for The Moon Dancers

by Archmage

schedule October 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
SLOW THE FUCK DOWN SON

srsly i feel like i just read a 15 chapter story in2 a long but inadequate 1-shot, u bring stuff up in recallection that supposedly happened during the time ur story covers but that u didnt show it and ur writing style is rushed and sloppy with mistakes all over the place.

also, ur writing a my little ponies story, so i woudl just assume u know about the show...so u dont have 2 keep trying 2 prove how much u know about it by dropping references 2 the show and the fandom every 5 seconds, there were times i was wreading and i just wanted 2 yell "YES U HAVE SEEN THE SHOW I GET IT ALREADY"