rate_review Reviews

Like many readers, I was scrolling through the story thinking "where's the smut. Wheres the smut?". But then I really read the story, and let this play in the background
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gYPPs7cA3Oc

It came alive for me. You did a really good job putting this story together. My only suggestion would be to make better use of dialogue tags so I know who is saying what. Remember, for every new POV, make a new paragraph.

I loved the unfusing...it was heart breaking. And the epilogue was very touching in more ways than one. Thank you. Keep up the good work.

I loved this. The idea of it. How when two entirely different people become one, a perfect unity, no one fighting for control just peace. And then taking that feeling away from them. Making them feel lost and alone without that feeling of being together! Fantastique! Are you going to continue this?!

That was amazing. Love the DBZ reference. Really wish Blossycup would've stuck around, but ah well.

Aside from the random "—"'s all over the place, this was a good story. I was hoping to see all three girls suddenly together, or just have Blossycup stick around. I honestly felt that you rushed the ending, that you broke apart Blossycup when you actually didn't need to. So what if some of their old friends wanted Blossom and Buttercup back. To hell with them. Just regular civilians, nonsense characters that helped build up part of the emotional plot. This feels like a one shot, so I doubt there will be another chapter, but alas. Had to share. Really wish you hadn't broken apart Blossycup.