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March 30, 2017 at 12:00 AM
You should continue this story thread as it could turn into a great multi-chapter story.
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November 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Your stories are based on good ideas, but are spoiled for the reader by poor grammar (note spelling) and punctuation. The erratic use of capital letters is disconcerting. Get a good beta who's good at English grammar (probably educated before the 1970s) and they's be readable.
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May 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Is it hOt in here or is it just this fic. Wow just wow you blew me away with this fic truly amazing I know it's been a while since you have updated hell you probably don't even write here anymore but I read it I liked it and I reviewed because I wanted too. Don't be afraid to start new sentences and paragraphs if a new person talked separate it as a separate paragraph. But nun the less completely enjoyable really hope you still write here. Chow Bennet out
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May 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
It was an ok story but your writing needs help you use the word AS way too much. Don't be afraid to end your sentence and start a new one. Also try using (ed) instead of (ing) on some of your words it will help. "moaned Gwen" instead of "moaning Gwen"
One more thing Gwen and Ben are the same age they were even born on the same day.
One more thing Gwen and Ben are the same age they were even born on the same day.