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October 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is probably one of the best Kevin/Ben fics I've read in a long time!
You manage to get the mood just right, and the description of the beginning of the shower scene is also wonderfully written, it's just a shame that the ending was so rushed, and comparatively un-descriptive. But I totally understand that those scenes can be very akward to write.
But other than the ending, and a few grammatical errors (which are easily fixed by a beta reader, which I am more than happy to do for you if you want, being the literary nerd I am.) it is perfect and wonderful and I think you should definitely keep writing!! =^w^=
You manage to get the mood just right, and the description of the beginning of the shower scene is also wonderfully written, it's just a shame that the ending was so rushed, and comparatively un-descriptive. But I totally understand that those scenes can be very akward to write.
But other than the ending, and a few grammatical errors (which are easily fixed by a beta reader, which I am more than happy to do for you if you want, being the literary nerd I am.) it is perfect and wonderful and I think you should definitely keep writing!! =^w^=
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ur gonna update right?! i cant wait for more but i will try. update soon please!