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Yeah, things are not really going to well, are they? Interesting to see Major Glory without his mask, and Dexter as their coordinating officer, huh? Will he be coordinating the Rowdyruffs, too, or does that fall to Mandark? I must say it is nice they were allowed to register as "heroes", since I'm guessing the alternative would be...unpleasant. I look forward to their first Dexter-coordinated fight. Until chapter 25/19, then. Laters.

To be honest, I'd always imagined your stories being post 9/11, not pre, but this actually works quite well, and the reactions are very believable. I was living in southern California at the time, myself. Of course, those headlines, real and fictional, at the end don't exatcly give much encouragement, do they? And glancing back at the dates of Blossom's therapy sessions, I guess I should have realized it was coming, huh? Well, until chapter 24, then. Laters.

Okay, not really sure if Blossom's improving or not right now. Meantime, I'm now dreadfully curious about what Him's been telling Bubbles and how it ties into whatever it is Sedusa's up to, and whoever it is she's working for. I again eagerly look forward to the next chapter, and I imagine it won't be too long since you've been cranking them out pretty quickly lately. Until then. Laters.

And the war of ids for control of Blossom rages on, and it seems she's more split than ever. I actually rather hope this isn't the last of Dr. Elise, the sessions are kind of fascinating. Either way, things are definitely heating up. I look forward to the next chapter. Until then. Laters.

Wow, just, wow... A very interesting step into her head and the current split therein. I find the touch of her good side be represented by her "Liberty Belle" persona, silly as it was at the time, quite fascinating. But on the end... did she just suicide? I trepidatiously look forward to the next chapter. Until then, laters.

Umm, most girls, I'm pretty sure, don't get their first periods until at least around fifth to seventh grade, to have it already at first arguably constitutes an extremely early bloomer, not to mention that usually happens after getting breasts, unless I'm very mistaken. Just saying. That aside, I think I see now what's caused her to finally regain her conscience, sudden hormone overload with a dash of pms. The next few chapters should be quite interesting irregardless. Well, until next chapter, then. Laters.

Well, well, it seems like Blossom's conscience has finally risen from the grave, along with the girl she used to be before Aku ever appeared before them, and now she's suffering a battle of ids. Though I got to wonder why she's bleeding, and from where exactly. I definitely look forward to the next chapter. Until chapter 19/15, then. Laters.

Oh, and before I forget, from this moment on - Blossom froze don't you ever touch me again and stared at Princess. - the chapter is all in italics. You may want to fix that. Just saying. Again, Laters.

Baku? Seriously, doesn't he ever consider anything that isn't an alteration or rhyme of his true name, I mean how long does he really think that's going to work? But at least Blossom and Boomer seemed to have fun. And you'd think after the aforementioned previous beating into the ground that some, at the very least, of Princess's snobbiness would have abated, but apparently some people never learn... Well, until chapter 18, then. Laters.

I don't speak lightly when I say this is one of the best stories I've read on this forum. I have never, in my life, laughed so hard at the depiction of an Evil From Before Time biting into his very first hot dog! xD Keep it up, My friend! Yours is the work of a true word smith!

However, I do have a word of advice. The way you write your dialogue is sometimes a little confusing. By that, I mean that sometimes you place your dialogue next to the wrong character, making it seem like he/she was speaking when it was actually someone else. I would suggest relegating characters and their dialogue into their own paragraphs, thereby dispelling any confusion as to who is saying what.

Can't wait until the next chapter, and I hope there are many more to come. Peace out!

Sincerely,

Hex

Frankly, you'd think Princess wouldn't want anything to do with the Powerpuff Girls after her last appearance, given how badly Blossom plowed her into the ground that time. And I can see her doing a lot of studying while away, probably not much else to do aside of watch TV and maybe surf the web while in her hospital room. It'll be interesting to see where this little sub plot leads. Well, until chapter 17, then. Laters.