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for Ben and Julie's Lemony Days

by Freakgamer

schedule June 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
How about some stretching with humongosaur, then hug a cock and be used to masturbate it, and finish with a swim in a Godzilla's worth of cum puddle?

Oh, and since he's reptilian-like, give'im a hemipenis! :D
person magic713
schedule May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sweet. I luv your story. Each one has something different to add on. Plz continue.
person mike226
schedule January 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very nice use of Ghostfreak. Good to see this updated again.
person mike226
schedule November 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is going great so far but maybe you could have the new alien (from Alien Swarm) make an appearance?
schedule November 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
heh, interesting. its alright.
schedule October 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's decent for a beginner's work, but you're pretty rough around the edges. First, your punctuation is iffy in a lot of places; sometimes commas aren't there or are in the place of semicolons. Also, you could use some work on adding description to the words themselves and finding ways to start paragraphs without using their name. There's a part in chapter one where you see "Julie" start off three consecutive paragraphs, and it sort of pulled me out of the story.