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by Mindscapes

person Dantanko
schedule September 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Not bad for your first time! :) Well, first time at a sex scene, that is. You did of course have a few stumbles - more semantically than syntactically - but hot damn! I never thought a scene with Rourke could be so... hot. It certainly gives me a few ideas for my own stories... :ponder, ponder:

I love how you isolate it to Helga's point of view, but damn it all! I can't find "Love's Loyalties," and now this story has me intrigued about that one. Take that as a good sign for your writing, I say, your work is a breath of fresh air in a sea of briny fanfiction.