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for Bad Manners

by noOne335

person Galactus
schedule August 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Pretty uninspired, especially considering that this was based on a previously existing fic that told pretty much the same story just with more graphic emphisis on the scat elements. Still as stated by the author this is their first fic, but considerable work needs to be done to elevate this writing above barely passable. Practice.
schedule August 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting job on this, please add more when you can.