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by ladytrys

person Julie
schedule June 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awwwwwww! That chapter was so sweet! Great reading
person oldwolf
schedule March 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I'd say you were crueler to Modo this chapter than any before. Getting the poor guy all worked up and then leaving him flat.

Good chapter all in all both funny and exciting in turn. Only comment concerning the sparring match is Modo's use of the Full Nelson, but if all he's got it a TV Wrestling education, he wouldn't know how dangerous the move can be.

Look forward to the next chapter.
person oldwolf
schedule March 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hm... Silver has her mother's looks, her fathers physique, and hopefully either Modo or Alloy's temperament. If she's as prickly as her mother, in a few years there's going to be trouble.

I'm liking Alloy. Sister or not, he seems to tell it like it is.

All in all, great chapter and look forward to the next update.
person oldwolf
schedule March 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh mama, Modo can't catch a break.

Great story. Normally, I find something that can use improvement, but in this case, I can't.

Eagerly look forward to the next chapter.