rate_review Reviews

The writing was good but it feels really choppy. I would have rathered you expanded on the first part with Zuko and Sokka, maybe have them sparring or gathering food (like Sokka trying to spear something and Zuko watching from a safe distance). The "&" for separation roughs up the scenes, like a sudden brake in story flow. Transitions like the one from walking out on Katara to the Duke finding Zuko in the forest are easier to follow and not as drastic.

Katara is being a bitch. All the anger and hatred from before Southern Raiders is up, we get it. Maybe now it's time to see someone confront Katara about it, instead of just having angry-pms!Katara trying to start a fight?

The update was worth the wait, but it feels like there could have been more.

~*KA*~

(this is coming from someone who hasn't updated her own fics in years, so I'd take this with a grain of salt)

You're making friends Zuko, it's just taking a while. You have the majority, even Haru and The Duke care. Now all you need is Katara and you have a full house. XD.

~*KA*~

Sweet chapter is sweet.

Wow. I didn't think Zuko was getting physically ill from thinking about Jet. This was an awesome chapter.

~*KA*~

poor zuko he's had a tough life. Cute that aang is cheering him up. Update soon please

"Listening to him breath". That's so adorable. ^^~ A nice chapter, but a little short like the last one. Not complaining, just an observation.

~*KA*~

BTW, I use "oi" and I'm not from Great Britain or Australia. If you like using "oi," use "oi".

For the record, making ALMOST ANY CHARACTER say "Oi" is out of character. Unless the character is from Britain or Australia or some other place where they say it, THEY WILL NOT SAY IT. It sounds dumb.

I think this is really cute. I like the angst, because I just happen to love sob stories, but I also love your writing style. It's simple, but it's clear. You convey the emotions well, because I'm able to actusally feel them. I'm not just being "told" how they feel. ^_^ I hope you continue to update!

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wickedfences19514

Oh WOW.I always liked Haru in the first season but after the stache... I couldn't really look at him anymore. You've really added depth to him here and well...I think I have another pairing now. XD. Oh Zuko, who can't we sandwich you with?

~*KA*~

Aside from a few misspelled words, no complaints from this gramar-witch. And as always, your writing style is a pleasure to experience. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Ok. Sooooo....Im in love. With this story. Please update more!

This was a great story and I'm looking foward to reading more. I gave it 5+'s