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for Kingdom of War

by Jayrich

person the bayinet bleeder
schedule May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like what your doing with the story.
person kkorl
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i really like this story.
person watch this
schedule March 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I just simply love your work.
person Horel
schedule February 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed this avatar story.You have great imaganation for stories.
person Hands of stone
schedule December 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
fun chapter
person Somatose
schedule December 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter. Very well written, I like how you use language and you're descriptions are usually great. So far, the plot seems to be well thought out, even though the focus of the story shifts quite abruptly. I like the way you've portrayed Azula and Iroh. looking forward to the next chapter
schedule November 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
enjoyed it. Sort of wished the Gaang had put up a better fight, but still pretty entertaining. looking forward to longer and better chapters.
person Faerie In Combat Boots
schedule November 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting...a lot of potential. One problem though. In the scene with Azula in the infirmary you made a grammar and spelling mistake. You wrote: "Grounded Pedals" When it should be "Ground Petals" Other than that the story is very good so far.
person Somatose
schedule November 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've really enjoyed reading chapter 3, your descriptions are vivid and the plot is interesting...looking forward to next chapter
schedule November 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow, Gotta say, I find the character protrayals spot-on. You've given Toph all of the character I wish she had during the main series. Zuko's and Mai's relationship is great, and I still haven't quite figured out what you plan on doing with Sokka. at first I though menage a trois with suki and Ty Lee, but now... the possiblites are endless!! :) Keep on writing, this is my number one fic on aff.