Just wow! I love pretty much everything about your fic. It has everything I love in an adult fic, a good story, good characters and the sex parts comes naturally and aren't forced. It's not a "hey, let's bang each other" kind of story. It's a slow and natural progression. I loved it.
I aslo loved how you were able to take us inside Toph's head and how she perceived things as a blind teenage girl. I loved how you reminded us that Toph is younger and the others are aware of that and uneasy about if at first. That's great writting.
All in all, reading your story made me feel like I was watching a reel secret episode of the series. Like, had the original series ever decided to go there for some reason, that's how it would've happened.
My only downvote about it was that I found it hard to understand some of the positioning of the characters at time. Like when you said that Toph's arms were locked by Suki but somehow, she can still reach Suki's privates. That was hard to picture.
but anyway, great work, and I would most assuredly read a continuation of this story-- or anything else you choose to write!
keep up the amazing work,
Flamehead23a
It was a little hard to follow how the three were positioned at times but I think that's a problem for every erotic fanfiction. You really managed to convey how the characters, especially Toph, felt during the sex scene. Great use of language too.