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for Arthur and Hazel

by Santra

person James
schedule October 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love chapter 1 it was great. Please continue with your story.
schedule October 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That was very crumpled together and kinda hard to read. I would suggest trying to space it out more, and don't break up your sentences. It makes it sound choppy. But the idea is good, and it's not often you see a story like this. I'll give you an A for Effort ;)