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February 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this story is so sad please continue
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
T-T mean old plot bunnies hurt jack
J-chan
J-chan
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yaaaaaaaaay very nice one!! Sorry for replying SO VERY late!! D: I was afraid you erased your story!! T______T it was too good to be erased!!
I really loved the way you described little Jack's feelings ans thoughts! the way Chase was totally affected by Jack, not wanting to admit that he's the real slave not exactly the other way around, Chase is a slave for Jack's beauty, uniqueness and charm.
I also liked they way Clay made him feel better as well little Jack to him. The flute part was beautiful! (I imagined him playing flute celtic music) it was very sweet ^^
hmm as far as I can see, your story is taking time to develop more things, slowly but precise, though I wanna see more things... I don't know... some action.... (action can mean many things nowadays, but I was refering to the fact that Clay reveals and defends Jack from Chase or something like that, but action of the smut kind is always welcome! since this is adultfanficion.net and all, I generally preffer smut at the end, it's like the long-awaited part xD (specially if it's from a well written yaoi-slash fanfic) but that's for you to decide :)
It's totally ok! your fic is rocking out loud in this site anyway! ;)
Take your time at updating, but try to add more excitement in your fic :) take care!!
I really loved the way you described little Jack's feelings ans thoughts! the way Chase was totally affected by Jack, not wanting to admit that he's the real slave not exactly the other way around, Chase is a slave for Jack's beauty, uniqueness and charm.
I also liked they way Clay made him feel better as well little Jack to him. The flute part was beautiful! (I imagined him playing flute celtic music) it was very sweet ^^
hmm as far as I can see, your story is taking time to develop more things, slowly but precise, though I wanna see more things... I don't know... some action.... (action can mean many things nowadays, but I was refering to the fact that Clay reveals and defends Jack from Chase or something like that, but action of the smut kind is always welcome! since this is adultfanficion.net and all, I generally preffer smut at the end, it's like the long-awaited part xD (specially if it's from a well written yaoi-slash fanfic) but that's for you to decide :)
It's totally ok! your fic is rocking out loud in this site anyway! ;)
Take your time at updating, but try to add more excitement in your fic :) take care!!
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August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay!!! This is awesome!! I just came across this and love it!!! I'd love to beta-read for you, too!My e-mail is niiro_yuuyake@yahoo.com! I'm such a grammar nerd at times! But yea, this is great! I absolutely adore ChaseJack stories and this one is AWESOME!!!!!! Do update soon!!!
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August 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT thanks a lot!!
oh and I'm sorry I couldn't reply this before, I'm not going to be on internet very often (my classes started)
and in my college PCs they blocked this page (and many other entertaintment pages like deviantart, myspace, etc) but gladly not fanfiction.net (phew!) anyway I really apreciated the updates! you made my day when you posted it! it gets more and more interesting...
Damn, I think I'm going to draw you something... if I do, I'll let you know ^^
continue it! :D
oh and I'm sorry I couldn't reply this before, I'm not going to be on internet very often (my classes started)
and in my college PCs they blocked this page (and many other entertaintment pages like deviantart, myspace, etc) but gladly not fanfiction.net (phew!) anyway I really apreciated the updates! you made my day when you posted it! it gets more and more interesting...
Damn, I think I'm going to draw you something... if I do, I'll let you know ^^
continue it! :D
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August 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this story! I can't wait till you continue and by-the-by if you're looking for a beta, I would love to beta this for you.
Anyway, same thing as I said before, love the story and can't wait till the next update!
chack0is0love <3
Anyway, same thing as I said before, love the story and can't wait till the next update!
chack0is0love <3
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August 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh my god... THANKS TO YOU!! :D
I wouldn't review if this story wasn't so damn interesting... not mentioning intense!
I really liked the way you wrote the baron's emotion and the many thoughs running on his head about the boy
and poor Jack, he didn't even try to make baron Chase feel like that, it's just his very self that is causing all of this
It's just the fact that the boy exists, his mere existence shows Chase that the intraquility he was feeling is because the boy is his lifemate, the one for him, the one he didn't know he needed, the one whose heart belong to without even knowing it.
I believe they both don't know it, so I guess your story is about the connection between the baron and the boy.
Too bad Chase has other things in mind and doesn't realize the thruth, so he's going to make the boy suffer, make his life a living hell... too bad Chase doesn't want to admit he needs him!... and maybe start love him as well (that will be eventualy)
Yup. Pretty touching fic, a very well done one! ^^
and you know what? I suggest you go and write this on fanfiction.net (and don't worry about the mature content, FF.net also has a M rating and there is a good number of stories like that so you're not the only one)
Chack fandom is still alive and some part of it is in ff.net and there are really good stories as well!
anyway the decission is yours, if you want to update here it's totally okay I'll take a look at it very often
but let me tell you something, your story will be way more apreciated in ff.net ^^
I wish you luck in your studies, mine start in 3 days and I wouldn't update my stuff very often (not really fics, I'm more of a fanartist xD) and well my DA username is the same as well as my FF.net one
again, thanks a lot for the update!! I loved it!! I love Chack!! ><
See you! Update when you can! (I hope soon)
I wouldn't review if this story wasn't so damn interesting... not mentioning intense!
I really liked the way you wrote the baron's emotion and the many thoughs running on his head about the boy
and poor Jack, he didn't even try to make baron Chase feel like that, it's just his very self that is causing all of this
It's just the fact that the boy exists, his mere existence shows Chase that the intraquility he was feeling is because the boy is his lifemate, the one for him, the one he didn't know he needed, the one whose heart belong to without even knowing it.
I believe they both don't know it, so I guess your story is about the connection between the baron and the boy.
Too bad Chase has other things in mind and doesn't realize the thruth, so he's going to make the boy suffer, make his life a living hell... too bad Chase doesn't want to admit he needs him!... and maybe start love him as well (that will be eventualy)
Yup. Pretty touching fic, a very well done one! ^^
and you know what? I suggest you go and write this on fanfiction.net (and don't worry about the mature content, FF.net also has a M rating and there is a good number of stories like that so you're not the only one)
Chack fandom is still alive and some part of it is in ff.net and there are really good stories as well!
anyway the decission is yours, if you want to update here it's totally okay I'll take a look at it very often
but let me tell you something, your story will be way more apreciated in ff.net ^^
I wish you luck in your studies, mine start in 3 days and I wouldn't update my stuff very often (not really fics, I'm more of a fanartist xD) and well my DA username is the same as well as my FF.net one
again, thanks a lot for the update!! I loved it!! I love Chack!! ><
See you! Update when you can! (I hope soon)
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
xD yay! you updated! I've read this story nearly the day you updated but I just couldn't review before (finals, glad they ended)
Oh and I'm Some fangirl btw, I wanted to encourage you without having to write again xD
Anyway your story is getting more and more exciting! and Clay's role as guardian is very fitting
I'm really sorry for Jack (even though is Chack XD) I thought your Chase would be a little more... mmm smooth (I find yours a little too bad-tempered) of course he's cruel, but in a smooth/misterious way (at least in my point of view) But your story is going well :P
Can't wait what happens next! O.O
Oh and I'm Some fangirl btw, I wanted to encourage you without having to write again xD
Anyway your story is getting more and more exciting! and Clay's role as guardian is very fitting
I'm really sorry for Jack (even though is Chack XD) I thought your Chase would be a little more... mmm smooth (I find yours a little too bad-tempered) of course he's cruel, but in a smooth/misterious way (at least in my point of view) But your story is going well :P
Can't wait what happens next! O.O
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July 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very tragic initiation, with Raimundo and Wuya as the bastard parents (although I kind of like the RaiWuya pairing)
and Kimiko being the protective sister plus Jack as the sweet innocent child. Poor little thing. But it makes me want to read more.
I'll look forward for your updates. Interesting fic so far.
and Kimiko being the protective sister plus Jack as the sweet innocent child. Poor little thing. But it makes me want to read more.
I'll look forward for your updates. Interesting fic so far.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it continue