rate_review Reviews

I liked this story alot, especially the smutty parts- I can't wait to read more, and I'm kinda hoping for a threesome with Ty-Lee and Suki ^_* I haven't read a combination of that one yet.

It really is a good story.

Need Moar
This story is brillant.

What an awesome start! I can't wait to find out what happens next. (Leer) The characters are very much IN character and the dialogue flows very nicely. The action scenes are fast-paced but accurate, keeping pace with everyone's manuevers. A lot of authors have trouble with that. I am totally caught up in this story and am dying to know how this will end. (What will Suki do? How will she react? As a Kyoshi warrior, is she a little more tolerant of women, or open to the idea of a MFF with Sokka and Ty Lee? Would Ty Lee be? Is that even going to happen? Heehee, I know Mai and Zuko's obvious end...but still wonder how much she'll let him off the hook after the obvious way to escape the soldiers' attention...)

Too many questions - need more story! =)

Fate

PS - I noticed that you only allowed "Signed In" reviews - you might want to take that off in your author profile so that unsigned/anonymous reviews can be left. Usually I'm too lazy to sign in myself, but this little fic deserved it. =3

Now, this next chapter will determine if this story is good or bad. You've taken quite a few liberties with the main characters and you will need to back up this chapter with a solid second chapter. On the writing side, I saw few mistakes and you let the story flow well. Update again soon!