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September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm still liking your story. There's a good balance of sex and adventure, and plenty of romance to tie the two together. Though I am sad that Sokka didn't get to take down Combustion man. You seem fixated on Zuko, and while I know that it is his story, and I'm okay with him being the only lightningbender (what happened Azula!?), I think you're making him a little too powerful, a little too perfect. I would have liked seeing him in a little trouble from the Ravagers, and maybe having Toph or some of the others help him out a bit more than you had. Still, thos're just the gripes of a fanboy. Great story, and keep up the good work!
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September 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story so far. You have the phrasing of a master storyteller, and all the characters are very realistic, in all the scenes. One thing, you seem to spell 'speak' as 'speek' a lot. Great story though, keep it up!
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July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome
Loved the ending
Loved the Katara/Iroh momment
I love the Katara/Azula pairing. It's so unique...
Loved the ending
Loved the Katara/Iroh momment
I love the Katara/Azula pairing. It's so unique...
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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the all time greatest stories I have ever read... ever!
You are like, simply amazing.
This story... I can't find the words, but it's good, trust me!
You are like, simply amazing.
This story... I can't find the words, but it's good, trust me!
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May 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed this chapter. The lemon wasn't as detailed as some, and part of me liked that. Still quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but a good read.
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May 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Spelling was a little worse in this chapter, but I loved the action. Excellent plot!
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May 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I am a little confused by the ending, but I will just wait patiently for the next chapter. Good chapter overall. :)
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May 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice. I really liked this chapter. Not as many spelling errors, or at least I didn't notice them. I really like the way this story is headed.
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May 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A wonderful story that gets better and better with each chapter you write, but there is one knock I have on it: the formatting. For some reason, some of the chapters are formatted in a weird way, or are not displaying correctly.
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May 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for the additions. There were a few spelling & grammar errors, but not bad. Overall a good read. : )