rate_review Reviews

I have to say, this is written excellently for an adult fanfic...not like a lot I've seen in this section that jumps straight to the sex. You have very good writing skills...no grammatical errors whatsoever, and the characters aren't out of character. In fact, this looks like a regular Ben 10 episode( with a hint of naughtiness). Kudos to you, my friend, this is what adult fanfiction is all about! A balance of Plot, character, and sex. I really do hope you take your time writing this excellent piece...I support you all the way to the finish!

Oh yes, almost forgot...You really are evil...leaving me sexually frustrated... ~_~;

wow I love this story, it really captures their characters. If you can I'd definately suggest continuing it.

Pretty good build up I like it. Since Ben 10 alien force is set 5 years in the future that would make them 16 right? Until the mean time they can at least sneak around behind their families back and kiss and cuddle. So it would be a little cute. I wonder how Gwen would kiss and hug Ben in some of his alien forms? Keep up the great work.

Good.... Very good. Love the sexual tension.

I have to say this wasn't half bad. I liked how you didn't go straight to Ben and Gwen having sex. like you said they are too young. Although I thought that they still were 10. Gwen was planning her birthday like three months ahead of time. You managed to keep it level without going overboard with their thoughts. I liked it, and good job

Excellent Story! This story is well written and entertaining, and yes the ending did catch me by surprise. I hope you do more stories, even a continuation of this one, (it doesn't need to be pornographic). Good Luck with your future endeavors.