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April 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Once again, so cute! Shy Zuko is just adorable. As far as grammar is concerned, only two things that need to be fixed.
1) In the sentence "Zuko blushed and bit his lower lip while Sokka lift his eyebrow." it should be '...Sokka lifted his eyebrow'
2) In the sentence "Sokka smiled at that and continued with what he did before." it should be '...and continued with what he was doing' or 'with what he was doing before'
Other than that your English is really good! I would love to see you write a whole Zuko/Sokka story. Keep up the good work!
1) In the sentence "Zuko blushed and bit his lower lip while Sokka lift his eyebrow." it should be '...Sokka lifted his eyebrow'
2) In the sentence "Sokka smiled at that and continued with what he did before." it should be '...and continued with what he was doing' or 'with what he was doing before'
Other than that your English is really good! I would love to see you write a whole Zuko/Sokka story. Keep up the good work!
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March 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*squeal* write a post-coitus one! Pleeeeeease?
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March 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So CUTE! X3 The last line was the icing on the cake! Please write some more Zuko/Sokka! *gives you the lint from my pocket* b^_____^;