rate_review Reviews

Oh yeah. Definitely needed to reread those first two chapters. It had been so long I completely forgot that Will told her mom about the Guardians between chapters 1 and 2.

Great stuff here. All of it! Keep up the awesome work! I am so looking forward to the next astounding chapter in this great work! =)

Wow. I never expected that you really would choose to develop Susan and Will as a couple instead of just a casual-fun kind of thing! Have no doubts, you did it very well! You were so good, in fact, that I actually feel disappointed that you're going to be moving on to focus on one of the other characters next chapter (even though I know I'll probably love it, like all the other chapters)! I just hope that you'll get the chance and interest in doing more chapters about Susan and Will later, because it's sweet and really interesting to read (not to mention crazy hawt!). Maybe something regarding how Irma feels about it all? Not to play favorites, but as much as I like Irma, I hope Will's heart is for Susan.

I guess I'm babbling now, so I'll stop. This is a great story, this was a great chapter, I can't wait to see what else you do, and I just hope and pray there will be more with Susan and Will and their relationship! Keep writing!

Well my friend was raving about how good this was and that I HAD to read it even though I've never even seent Witch. So I went and Wiki'd it and got a little intro course on the characters so I could read this and shut that guy up (I think he might be the "A Good Writer" reviewer, he's such a ego maniac sometimes).

But wow it was worth it! You get plenty of praise for your Will-Susan angles so I'll just say I like that and move on. I was also very impressed with chapter 3, the one about Taranee and Cornelia. It was so sexily written, simple and quiet but stimulating and exciting the whole time. You have a talent at writing yuri if this story is any indication. While other authors usually have to find more and more extreme sexy acts to show to grab attention and escalate interest past the "Well I've seen this before" stage, you use poignant writing that gets into the head of the characters and describes the situation with such care and detail that even the supposed "normal, boring" yuri sex acts that you see in a million fanfics seem new, exciting, and REALLY sexy. Only a few yuri authors I know of do that well, people like Wotan Anubis, that guy who did the Wild Arms yuri fic, and sometimes Racewing. And of course as far as I can tell (which isn't much because I haven't watched the show!) the characters are all in character and developed really well. I really like the relationships you make between each of them and I'm looking forward to seeing you continue writing them...and yes I have to say, the Susan-Will thing really is well-done. I like all the stuff and I think you're probably gonna get too many comments about this part and not about the rest, but it really is neat that you're actually writing a STORY about yuri incest and treating it seriously instead of just a wham-bam-thank-you-ma'am one-shot sort of thing. That's new and different, and you're a great writer to be the one to explore it.

Okay that's enough from me. I'll let my friend do the reviews from now on, but I WILL be reading and waiting for each new part! I might just have to get into Witch so I can better appreciate this story....

This story is great, please keep going with it. Would love to see more Will and Susan! How would a real romantic relationship with them work out?

I absolutely love the fact that Oedipus was on TV, I bet not many ppl who read this pick up on that, but I just wanted to say that it's a great little easter egg.

Well done. Keep it up.

You have a fantastic style and great ideas! Each chapter is great, and I love how they each build a little on the last story somehow. You also did probably the best mother-daughter lemon I've ever read, practically nobody ever has a setup where the *daughter* has the crush *and* feels guilty about it, and you did it so well, it was so sweet and emotional! I know you like jumping to new ideas each chapter, but I really hope you come back to Susan and Will at some point even though I know you're angling at Will and Irma hooking up, because it would be great to see your take on a mom-daughter long term romance story and how they would deal with things and work it out. But I'll be here to read whatever you do next any way!

That was fucking hot.

"I waited for you, Gunwild... I waited for you."

Hello, just wanted to say that I'm loving this story and I really enjoy your writing style. Keep up the good work!