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January 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
this is great, i hope you continue it soon, since you ask for ideas what about irma not being able to get the idea of will and susan out of her head and deciding to try out a relationship with a milf herself, only it doesnt have to be with her mom, maybe one of her friends moms? that coudl be great for getting some situations to work with the characters, like if she started to date cornelia's mom for example not only could you write about that sexy relationship but also about how it affects irma and cornelia's friendship.
but i have to admit a lot of this idea is just me wanting irma to find someone other than will so she can stop getting in the way of will and susan lol!
but i have to admit a lot of this idea is just me wanting irma to find someone other than will so she can stop getting in the way of will and susan lol!
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December 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is officially one of my favourite WITCH stories.
sensuality, lust, uncertainty, lust, teenage angst, lust and a healthy dose of raw sex.
the only flaw I could find in the story as a whole is Will learning of the g-spot After using Irma's to get her off and being so bashful and shy with her mother after domineering her friend with her mothers help earlier.
Other than that its hot yuri goodness all the way.
sensuality, lust, uncertainty, lust, teenage angst, lust and a healthy dose of raw sex.
the only flaw I could find in the story as a whole is Will learning of the g-spot After using Irma's to get her off and being so bashful and shy with her mother after domineering her friend with her mothers help earlier.
Other than that its hot yuri goodness all the way.
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October 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful. I'm guessing that the next chapter will be the conclusion of the story?
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June 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow Hay Lin, put off meeting back up with friends and family who have been worried because you disappeared all day just so you can suck face with your girlfriend a little move.....kind of a dick move there! No but seriously, this chapter was great, even more than I would have thought it would be, I can't believe I missed it when you updated it. I hope more is soon coming!
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June 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love this story, you write it very good and it is very true for the characters. I think one chapter should be what it is like for Will and Susan to have a date in a public place.
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June 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this series! This is my second time reading Chapter 6. The Hay Lin/Orube dynamic works surprisingly well. Also, definitely looking forward to seeing how things go when Hay Lin has that talk with her parents.
BTW, there's a typo in paragraph 4 still: "They had appeared in public, in as Guardians," The "in" needs to go.
One thing I think this story needs is more explanation of how Cornelia and Taranee got together. We've gotten to see how everyone else hooked up but those two were first shown already together. I'm guessing that must be a rather interesting story. Maybe they could tell it to their friends once everybody's secrets start coming out within the group.
BTW, there's a typo in paragraph 4 still: "They had appeared in public, in as Guardians," The "in" needs to go.
One thing I think this story needs is more explanation of how Cornelia and Taranee got together. We've gotten to see how everyone else hooked up but those two were first shown already together. I'm guessing that must be a rather interesting story. Maybe they could tell it to their friends once everybody's secrets start coming out within the group.
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April 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful as always. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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April 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is my first time I have reading this story, but from what I have hear that it is very popular and people have been waiting for updates, so good for you for giving them one! I really like the style of your writing style, you really know how to get a reader into the story and the characters heads. You make very interesting and different relationship ideas! Also this story is super sexy, I have rarely almost never read such a hot story. I hate to jump on a bandwagon but I agree with almost everyone else, Will and Susan are the best relationship here, but that doesn't meant the others aren't also very good, I like Orube and Haylin especial now with the latest chapter. Now that I have read this story I love it and I will check it every week for a new chapter!
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April 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Yahoooy! Finally a sixth chapter of one of my fave fice. Well done, very well done.
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April 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
HOLY FUCKING SHIT. JUst when I had given up on this story ever being contineud, you ride in and save the day with a new chapter. And this chapter was great! Before this chapter, I thought the Hay Lin and Orube thing wasn't all that interesting compared to the others, but you just made them second to Will and Susan! The characterization is wonderful, you've mande me love this couple, and I don't know why you're not satisfied with the sex scene because it's all the better for being short and sweet. GREAT JOB!!!
If I had to pick one thing I didn't like about this chapter, the only thing I could say was that Orube identified Will and Irma as a couple. I thought Will and Irma's chapter was nice and gave Irma some good confidence and all, but it didn't seem to be anything for them to get together for (especially not when you'd did such a great chapter of Will and Susan hooking up), and I really want Will to be emotionally exclusive with Susan, for them to be real, complete lovers.
But other than that tiny nitpick, this chapter was probably the best non-Susan chapter so far, and I loved it. Please, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE continue! And I don't want to rush genius, but waiting for these is AGONIZING!
If I had to pick one thing I didn't like about this chapter, the only thing I could say was that Orube identified Will and Irma as a couple. I thought Will and Irma's chapter was nice and gave Irma some good confidence and all, but it didn't seem to be anything for them to get together for (especially not when you'd did such a great chapter of Will and Susan hooking up), and I really want Will to be emotionally exclusive with Susan, for them to be real, complete lovers.
But other than that tiny nitpick, this chapter was probably the best non-Susan chapter so far, and I loved it. Please, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE continue! And I don't want to rush genius, but waiting for these is AGONIZING!