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for Kim's Day

by vexxxiang

schedule January 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far, so good, but that second chapter clearly needed to be beta'd. Way too many grammar errors and at least one spelling error(and a word that I'm both not sure is the word you meant to use, or that it even is a word...) Practice, practice, practice!
schedule January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting first chapter. Waiting to see how the next chapter goes...
person Quondam
schedule January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Always leave them wanting more is a rule of mine and while that was a nice taste, I want more...
schedule January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
its good so far I can't wait to see more